Untouchables

14 years

I call, annoyed at having to repeat myself...

she collapses right before me.

I lean into her fur that smells like the sun,

and croon my love, my gratitude...

I know she can't stand to be held-

wild dog, snow dog, best friend.

I can't bury her, leg broken...

I feel the rain, I feel the rain...

the rain and her, and wait

at the end of the driveway for the

nice man who uses his backhoe to

bite a piece of earth...

she's laid in Sandy's sleeping bag

(he too gone to Summerland)

and the earth is neatly flipped,

like a pancake,

We are Indian untouchables-

but we are fierce and free of hateful bonds....

my girl, go home,

I'll find you there,

in Ollinger's field.

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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

So difficult to write a poem about the death of a loved one. So easy to fall into 'mere' sentimentality and raw feeling and 'midst the strong emotions, the poem gets overwhelmed, or forgotten entirely. Not here. Here the poet validates and enshrines her bond with her friend. Language, pacing, tone, cadence combine seamlessly here to create a fine testament to a departed friend . Well done


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Moon, thank you so much, ah, I have to call your son, thus you, be well, I'll talk soon...


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

I'll be there evening of July 17, all day July 18, then earl evening July 21 to about July 28.


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Roger on that! Be well- how is Hy?


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Aha! I will call today!!!


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

Really enjoyed talking to you m'dear. After what--two years!!--to hear an actual voice makes you come alive a little bit more. To get into Linkedin, just google Linkedin. Once there, join. Then look for Groups--there must be about 20 different Poetry groups. A good PUBLIC forum is We Write Poetry. A couple of others--Poets and Poetry Review and Discuss--are worth a look. Anything you post on these 3 sites will be regarded as "published", just like Hubpages. I would also like you to check out METAPHOR--OPEN POETIC DISCUSSION, an invite-only group where I do most of my stuff. This is a workshop. We comment closely, often somewhat bluntly, and poems here are considered works-in-progress. Publishers do NOT regard work posted here as "pblished" If you're interested, please request membership from my good friend Ron Peat, the Manager--poetron@hotmail.com. Make sure you mention my name. Get in there, look around. If you decide you aren't interested, simply do not post. Simple as that, but I think you'll like what you see. One helluva lot better than stupid HP.


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Are you sure you are as old as you say? I was a great pleasure to speak to you! I'm still a bit scattered, but I will go to linked in....be well, be happy, and thanks again for your friendship.....!


moon 2 years ago

My ancient Aunt used to say that Cook men START to mature a little, at about age 60. I'm still a juvenile delinquent at heart and above the neck.


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Clark, you have my e-mail, not to be a pest, but could you provide yours? I'm a bit lost on linkdin thx, lily


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

moonfroth@gmail.com


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Thank you Moon... lost linked in thread five times, trying to thank you, everybody, and comment on others poetry. I'll cool down first tho. Thank you sir, for great insight and kindness! love yaz, lily


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

Lily, if you haven't, you need to join Linkedi, set up an ACCOUNT, SET UP SETTINGS etc, join GROUPS. it's pretty straightforward--just follow the prompts.


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

yep, did that- confused about the long thread tho, It's hard to access correctly, but, I'll get it!


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

OK, open ANY post in WWP. Just above the title of the post you see the word DISCUSSIONS. Double click that. The screen will now flick to the NEWEST post on the boards. You don't want that one, but now you can scroll down thru all of the posts until you find the one you want. Click on it and you'll get the post and ALL the comments, and you can add your own at the end.


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

beaufiful, thanks moon


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lilyfly 2 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska Author

Clark, would you please send me an e-mail to lillianstaats0@gmail.com? This retarded computer is driving me mad. I'm writing a book, and wonder if I could have you read it. I do not trust anyone to give me good advice but you.

Right now, it's in hardcopy, but as soon as I have the time, and Mary has time: I'll transfer it to zipdisk.

Well, I hope this note finds you well. Why did nobody comment on this poem? If it were me, I would have consoled that person. Anyway... Be well, please send a one liner to me, then I can write to you... be well, be happy...lily


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

Will do.

Regarding your poem, I'd post it on We Write Poetry. And don't forget about the private group I told you about------

I would also like you to check out METAPHOR--OPEN POETIC DISCUSSION, an invite-only group where I do most of my stuff. This is a workshop. We comment closely, often somewhat bluntly, and poems here are considered works-in-progress. Publishers do NOT regard work posted here as "pblished" If you're interested, please request membership from my good friend Ron Peat, the Manager--poetron@hotmail.com. Make sure you mention my name. Get in there, look around. If you decide you aren't interested, simply do not post. Simple as that, but I think you'll like what you see. One helluva lot better than stupid HP.


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Hyphenbird 2 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Lily, I am so sorry. I didn't know. Since I seldom visit HubPages anymore, I do miss postings. I should get emails about anything you post but did not. I am shocked and heartbroken for you. Please email me if you need to talk. I never met Athena however she was my friend.


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Hyphenbird 2 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

I think so too Lily. I will try to email you. When I tried before, it was returned.


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moonfroth 2 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

Hy -- Lily's email works. Bet you typed a capital "O" rather than a zero after her name, and by the way, about A YEAR [!!!] ago, you promised the world an in-depth character study of Satan--remember?


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Hyphenbird 2 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Hello Mon. I may have. I was able to successfully send her a an email the other day. I am working on the Satan thing. It actually has turned into a book! Life has settled down so I can spend more time on my writing. Hopefully, I can make some progress. Thanks for remembering!

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