My first poetry

  1. arunjain1989 profile image59
    arunjain1989posted 7 years ago

    Friends i have just published my first poetry and I just want to know if poems are my cup of tea or no.So please read my poem and give me a honest feedback and suggestion to improve me would be more than  welcome.I am new to this and i would really like to improve.

  2. thranax profile image53
    thranaxposted 7 years ago

    I am sure you will improve. You might want to try using better grammar and "you" instead of "u"

    Unless its rap of course =P

    ~thranax~

    1. arunjain1989 profile image59
      arunjain1989posted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Thanks for the honest feedback.I would keep that in mind and I will surely correct you instead of u right away.

 
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