Read this poem with no haste.What would you do if I cried to you?What would you do if I screamed?What would you do if I hit your face?What would you do if I died?What would you do if I said go?What would you do if I cared?What would you do if I did embrace?What would you do if I lied?Crying and screamingAnd hitting and dyingSaying and caringEmbracing and lying;All may leave a medicinal taste.by: ProCW
No comments? Is it that bad? Or is it that good?
I'm seeing it more as a song lyric than as a poem. The repeated openings of the first 8 lines don't hold enough interest to stand alone, but as a lyrical device it's OK. So that's my suggestion - sing it!
Actually, with a nice catchy chorus in there... *scratches chin*
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