Is this too much for the faint hearted?

  1. JakeFrost profile image60
    JakeFrostposted 4 years ago

    Hi there,

    I am writing a semi biography/ true story for a close friend of mine. She has had a lot of trouble in her life and wanted to get it written. I have had mixed comments so far, one being:

    "I don't think I'd want to read that, I don't read these things very well. I have a sensative soul"

    and another being

    "Although an extremely hard situation to read about, I feel it is necessary to go on reading"

    Please check it out and see what you think, is it too much? I can't really lighten the story very well as it is not that type of story. I have only written on chapter so not too much to read... … ce-Summary

    1. WryLilt profile image87
      WryLiltposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      Some parts of the story and wording jarr and misplaced commas also misplace the flow.

      I'd also recommend turning off adverts as sensitive topics are against Adsense TOS.