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I'd like feedback on my Hub: Entertainment ! Entertainment ! Entertainment !

  1. Vanu430 profile image61
    Vanu430posted 11 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Entertainment ! Entertainment ! Entertainment ! (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image94
      theraggededgeposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      Hi there,

      Your hub is too short, too general and doesn't tell us anything new. Who do you think will be looking for this kind of information and what will they learn on your hub? Bearing in mind that such readers are looking at your article from a computer or mobile device. Wouldn't it be safe to say that they would already know about Facebook and Twitter?

      Your hub says, "yet in the online world an upset has occurred." And that would be?

      Looking at your life experience, I'm sure you could find something that you know that you could share with others? That's what HubPages is about.

      Good luck.

    2. Pollyanna Jones profile image97
      Pollyanna Jonesposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      A good Hub in my eyes, is something that tells us about something we might not know about, or is original material. If you write about something that we are all familiar with, then you need to write it well and present it as a critical analysis that we can mull over. For example, if you were looking at the things that put people off each of these social media sites, then present a conclusion about which one you think is the best, it would be a more interesting piece.

      The title doesn't really reflect the topic, and when you open the topic, it is just a wall of writing that doesn't flow very well, and presents nothing new. I would re-think this one and maybe start again.

      A few tip about writing Hubs:

      - What is it about?
      Think about what you are trying to present with your Hub. Is it informative or creative, or are you trying to make a point? Lead people in to the piece with the first paragraph so they can think about whether it is an article they want to sit through and read.

      - Layout
      Split your article into sub-topics and use titles in the Hub to split it up and make it more "bite sized" when reading through it.

      - Writing style
      Think about how the words flow. Rather than blasting someone with lots of stuff that rambles and garbles on, get to the point, use commas and full stops where needed, and watch out for repeating yourself.

      - Hub Topics
      Make sure your topic is original and something that your audience will want to read about. I would be far more interested in learning about each festival in India than how great Facebook is for keeping in touch with people. I don't think there are many people on the planet who don't know about this now!

      Think about what you know about, that others might not. The best articles always tend to come out of a flash of inspiration somewhere. Keep a note pad on you, so you can write down ideas wherever you may be.

      Good luck!

  2. calculus-geometry profile image87
    calculus-geometryposted 11 months ago

    What the hell is going on here with these new writers?

    The other day we had someone writing about how to buy clothes online, with such insights as measuring yourself first -- astounding!!! 

    Now we have someone who wants to share his ground-breaking discovery of Facebook and Twitter, two new sites that are going to make a big splash in the interwebs.

    1. NateB11 profile image92
      NateB11posted 11 months ago in reply to this


    2. kenyaentrepreneur profile image80
      kenyaentrepreneurposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      I fail to see your helpful advice, calculus-geometry. This new hubber asked pleasantly and politely for help.

      1. calculus-geometry profile image87
        calculus-geometryposted 11 months ago in reply to this

        There's no helping the OP and he/she is only on HP to promote his/her website lifenow.xyz.  Lighten up, these Captain Obvious hubs are unintentionally hilarious.

        Save your writing advice and your sanctimony for a more worthwhile purpose.

        1. kenyaentrepreneur profile image80
          kenyaentrepreneurposted 11 months ago in reply to this

          Why not start a new thread instead of making this individual feel unwelcome?

  3. kenyaentrepreneur profile image80
    kenyaentrepreneurposted 11 months ago

    Hello. You write clearly and well but there are a few things wrong with your hub. Firstly it is not long enough. Give it a few more pictures and many more words (in separate capsules with headings).

    It feels to me like you got going pretty well but then stopped way before you finished what you set out to say.

    I notice your url reflects your original title. I think you should go back to your original title and write fully about the topic you first chose. If you do a good job with it you should get lots of traffic with an evergreen hub.

    The heading you have now is not a good one. It repeats one word three times but will not rank in search engines. Go back to your original title and finish the hub with lots of information and I think you will be successful.

  4. FatFreddysCat profile image95
    FatFreddysCatposted 11 months ago

    They just arrived here from 2008 in a time traveling DeLorean...

    1. NateB11 profile image92
      NateB11posted 11 months ago in reply to this