I'd like feedback on my Hub: 10 I do something important when loneliness

  1. mansour07 profile image60
    mansour07posted 11 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub 10 I do something important when loneliness (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. kbdressman profile image88
      kbdressmanposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      Blunt Suggestions That Are Not Intended to Cause Offense:

      1- There are a number of grammar mistakes that make it difficult to follow your text.  I'd suggest having someone edit your text.

      2-Break your text into several capsules and give examples of each of your ten bullet points or explain why they are helpful.  Give more depth.

      3-Use relevant, attractive, specific and concise titles on all your capsules

      4-Supply more high quality media and outside links.  Find a ted talk to link to.  Add more photos.  Make it visually pleasing and stimulating. 

      5-Caption your images

    2. theraggededge profile image93
      theraggededgeposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      When loneliness... what? You can't end a title like that without a verb.

      I think kbdressman was being kind by saying "a number of grammar mistakes". Your hub is not written in anything approximating English. Sorry and all that, but it's true. You need to improve your English skills before you can write on Hubpages.