thank you for the feedback. i should capitalize more words at the start of the sentence. i think my punctuation is pretty good but everyone has room for improvement. but what do you mean about dialog and plot? its got a great plot and snappy dialog. and two characters.
well thanks i guess for reading it and providing your feeback but i have to disagree about what this site wants i have read lots of flahs fiction and even shorter poems with lots of comments. A couple of buddies of my read the story and they think it was great. different strolks for different folks as they say.
i bet they unpublished because i didn't put the tags. i read about tags. i don't kwno what tags are. do i make a new section with the subtitle Tags and list some keywords?
No, I'm just trying to gauge how to respond to you. We've recently been through a 'difficult' experience with a young writer.
So, one thing you need to do is to listen to hubbers who have been here a while. It may feel as though they are being harsh but they aren't. When people offer advice, take note, then go check out their own writing if you like.
You need to know that HubPages is not a great platform for fiction these days. It's mainly for magazine-type articles that show up in search engines. To earn any money here you need plenty of traffic, and fiction doesn't usually get very much. You might find it more profitable to set up your own blog, where you can add Amazon ads (such as blogger) to earn a bit of money.
This is so bad that it must be one of those reincarnated trolls trying to anger those that waste the time reading it. Surely no one could make that many mistakes by accident. "But wait", he argues, "me and a few buddies sat around drinking and they stopped watching funny videos on YouTube long enough to read this. They told me it was one of the best stories they had ever written. Wheeee!!!"
If you are not the person who was here last week then I apologize. Your writing style looks a lot like his though, and that person tore through here offending all the writers who bothered to give any help.
OK guys thank you for the feedbacks. I used MS Word spell checker and Grammarly and made all the sentences start with capital letters and added punctuation marks because I had been missing allot of them and I didn't notice and I spelled more words correctly too. Now it has really good grammar and I resubmitted it for publication.
I don't know about another writer that some people think I am. Who is this person who writes like me? I would like to read his stories.
I don't understand what you are trying to say. My hub is now published so it was the grammar that was the problem not the keywords or other peoples opinion about my writing style and the story line. i am a hubpages published author now.
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