I'd like feedback on my Hub: Dear Pepe the Great

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   honeyreyesposted 8 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub http://hubpages.com/relationships/Dear-Pepe-the-Great
   
   It's an open letter to a very important person in my life. I want it to be one of the Christmas gifts I am going to give him.
   
   This would mean so much to me if it passes the Quality Assessment Process as well as to him. I am sure it will make him extremely happy.
   
   What can I do to improve?
   
   Please send me feedback and I will sincerely appreciate it.
   
   Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      While I appreciate the sentiment behind this hub, it is not really the sort of piece HP is looking for, i.e. standalone articles that will attract external traffic. Is there a better place for you to publish this, as it is so personal? You could put it on Facebook, maybe?
      
      Have you used copyright free, Creative Commons licensed images?

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         honeyreyesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for the comment, I do appreciate it much. Yes I know it's a bit personal but I was hoping it can be featured here. I also had a bit of personal posts already featured here... so I was really hoping this one would too :-)
         If not, then yes maybe I will just need to publish it somewhere.
         
         
         I took the images from morguefile where it is free to use their pictures.
         
         Thank you so much theraggededge, I was worried no one would comment here.

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            calculus-geometryposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            I think it's a lovely gesture to create a sort of online thank you card.  What about making a standalone webpage using something like wix.com or wordpress.com? You would at least have control over the formatting and make it look more like a card or letter.  HP's format is more for articles. And as raggededge says it's probably not going to pass QAP given its personal nature.  Best of luck with it!

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               honeyreyesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

               Thanks Calculus, I think I will also agree with you. Anyway I am very open and thus if it is not going to be publish I'll just have to write it on the traditional way: letter sent in snail mail
               
               Thank you for your comment

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   psycheskinnerposted 8 years ago

   I don't understand who "Pepe the Great" is, and therefore do not understand what this hub is about.

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      honeyreyesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Hello Psycheskinner,
      
      this is supposed to be a letter to my friend Pepe

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   WriteAngledposted 8 years ago

   I suggest you read the following section in the Learning Centre
   http://hubpages.com/learningcenter/publ … d_22732041

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      honeyreyesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks WriteAngled for your suggestion! Now I understand why and how it wont be featured

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   willmcwryterposted 8 years ago

   wow i read this and i can feel pepe the greats presence right here in my room it's giving me spine tingles.  don't give up!

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      honeyreyesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks willmcwryter! Thanks that somehow lift me a bit about this

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   RJ Schwartzposted 8 years ago

   This work is a collection of sentences and I have no idea of what Pepe even is.
   Perhaps your thoughts come like that, so you may consider making it into a poem.
   Your thoughts are also all over the place and unfocused, almost like you are trying to put everything you can into this piece of work.
   It has a lot of potential and I can feel your passion for the subject in the words.

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      honeyreyesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks RJ,
      
      comments like yours is what I want. Something straightforward but with sense so I would really improve the way I write too

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