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I'd like a feedback on my Hub: Pacific War: Why the Japanese Empire's

  1. Ojie profile image78
    Ojieposted 9 months ago

    Hi fellow Hubbers!

    This is my first and only hub in Hubpages. I'm still new to the site and I want to focus more on how I can increase the exposure of my hubs before I write additional articles. Please give me some tips on how I can make this hub better, or should I change my writing style? And how can I increase the views for my hubs? Thanks!

    1. Ojie profile image78
      Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

      It seems I forgot to post the link to my hub so here it is. Again, I'd like to thank in advance those who'll give me constructive opinions regarding what I've written. Cheers guys!

      Pacific War: Why the Japanese Empire's Attack on Pearl Harbor became one of their Greatest Blunders of World War II

  2. RonElFran profile image96
    RonElFranposted 9 months ago

    First, in terms of writing style, I thought the hub was well written. The issue I see is more with content than style.

    What struck me immediately in reading your hub is that it took a long time to answer the question posed in the title. The first half recounts how the attack unfolded and some of the damage done, but doesn't seem to address at all the issue of why the attack was such a strategic blunder. Since most of what is covered in that material would already be familiar to someone interested in the attack, I think many readers might stop reading before they even got to the point you wanted to make.

    The biggest issue in getting traffic is time. It takes time to build up readership, and that equates to patience. In my opinion you have the makings of a good writer. So keep at it! Study the advice you'll find in the Learning Center and here in the forums on what it takes to get exposure, keep writing, and in the fullness of time, the readers will come.

    1. Ojie profile image78
      Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

      First of all I'd like to thank you for your wonderful comment. Hearing something like that from someone who seems like a seasoned writer gave me confidence in my writing style. Thank you so much.

      Do you think I should edit my hub and make my introduction shorter? Or should I remove my introduction altogether?

      1. RonElFran profile image96
        RonElFranposted 9 months ago in reply to this

        You definitely (and always) need an intro. But it should lead directly to the issue your hub is addressing. You can probably do that in a single paragraph. If I were writing it, I might say something along the lines of: "The Japanese attack on Pearl Harbor on Dec. 7, 1941 did a lot of damage. [Briefly list examples]. But for all the devastation it inflicted on the U. S. Pacific fleet, the attack turned out to be perhaps the greatest blunder of World War II." Then I would launch directly into why it was a blunder. Hope this helps.

        1. Ojie profile image78
          Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

          I see. I was trying to meet the minimum word requirements set by hubpages for an evergreen hub which is why I tried to make my intro as long as possible. It seems that I did more harm than good. I would definitely cut my intro and make it brief. Thank you!

          1. Peter Grujic profile image84
            Peter Grujicposted 9 months ago in reply to this

            It is a good article, which just needs some fine tuning.. Follow your own common sense. Most of the insight and advise you got on here really is for their own selfish reason to give advise- they mean well but they cannot teach let alone give positive advise. Reread it yourself and common sense will kick in.

            Take Care,

            1. Ojie profile image78
              Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

              Hi Peter!

              Thank you for the compliment. I'm currently reading materials that would hopefully help me in creating hubs that are both entertaining and direct-to-the-point. My hub also increased in score as I incorporated the advice given to me by Marisa and Ron. I'm looking forward to learning more stuff that will make a better writer in the future. Thanks again!

          2. Marisa Wright profile image92
            Marisa Wrightposted 9 months ago in reply to this

            There is no set minimum word requirement.   HubPages recommends 1250 words as a guideline ONLY.   In practice, Hubs do best in the range of 800 to 1500 words.

            Your title is better, by the way, but I would delete World War II.  If someone is interested enough in Pearl Harbour to research it, they already know it happened during WWII!

            1. Ojie profile image78
              Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

              Hi Marissa! I already deleted "World War II", edited where my images were located and placed them before my paragraphs. I also removed the video that I just got from Youtube.

              So far my hubscore went up all thanks to you guys. Do you have any tips on how I can promote my hubs? Maybe something related to backlinking?

  3. Marisa Wright profile image92
    Marisa Wrightposted 9 months ago

    1.  Your title is far, far too long. 

    On HubPages, you'll get most of your readers via Google.   The best way to rank well with Google is to craft a title that includes words or phrases people are likely to use when searching for this topic - and don't muddy the waters with words they wouldn't include.  So the first step is to ask yourself what people would type into Google if they were looking for this info.    They probably wouldn't type "Pacific War" or "Japanese Empire", so they're superfluous, for instance.

    2.  Think about what will show on the screen when the reader first arrives at your Hub. 

    You need to give the reader a reason to scroll down - if your first image or paragraph doesn't convince them you have the information they want, they'll click back to Google and try another site.  Currently the screen is filled with a video from someone else - they can get that anywhere, so that doesn't inspire confidence.  Remove the video and then revise your Hub so the first few paragraphs get straight to the point.

    3.  You seem to follow each heading with an image.  It feels to me as though that disconnects the heading from the text that follows.   I would have a paragraph of text under the heading, before the photo, in each case.

    1. Ojie profile image78
      Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

      Thank you for your very helpful advice on how I can improve my hub. I guess I need to study keyword research first if I were to create titles that would be searched a lot on google.

      Also thank you for pointing out what's wrong with my hub. I'm going to edit it later and apply the necessary changes. Hopefully, my future hubs would be of better quality.

      1. Marisa Wright profile image92
        Marisa Wrightposted 9 months ago in reply to this

        You don't really need to study keyword research.   Just use common sense!  Ask yourself, "what would I type into Google if I wanted to learn about this topic?" 

        Then start typing those ideas into Google and see what Google auto-completes for you.  Those auto-completes are based on what other people are typing in, so that gives you some good clues.

        1. Ojie profile image78
          Ojieposted 9 months ago in reply to this

          Oh I see! Thank you so much. I'm gonna go ahead and edit my title. It looks like I was making things complicated when in fact, it is very simple.