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I'd like feedback on my Hub: Green Tea and Your Metabolism

  1. ljsmarketing profile image78
    ljsmarketingposted 17 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Green Tea and Your Metabolism (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 17 months ago in reply to this

      Your hub is not just focused on Green Tea. Get rid of the exercise and protein shakes sections - they are not relevant to the topic of green tea. Or change the title of the hub.

      Also that first comments capsule is unnecessary and makes the hub appear to be shorter than it is. Get rid of it and just keep the one at the end.

      Your writing is fun but it's a little 'ra! ra!'. Too many exclamation points!!! Hubs are supposed to emulate magazine articles so you might consider toning it down a little.

      Good luck.

      1. FatFreddysCat profile image94
        FatFreddysCatposted 17 months ago in reply to this

        You got all that from a six-sentence paragraph? Or are we looking at two different things? (scratches head)

        1. theraggededge profile image96
          theraggededgeposted 17 months ago in reply to this

          There's more under the first comment capsule.

        2. psycheskinner profile image80
          psycheskinnerposted 17 months ago in reply to this

          Scroll down.

  2. FatFreddysCat profile image94
    FatFreddysCatposted 17 months ago

    This is not a "hub," it's a paragraph. HubPages expects longer pieces (approximately 1000-1100 words) on any given topic.

  3. psycheskinner profile image80
    psycheskinnerposted 17 months ago

    You have a lot of littlle technical errors, such as incorrect use of periods and commas.  I would suggest slowing down and going through it a second time to copyedit.

  4. FatFreddysCat profile image94
    FatFreddysCatposted 17 months ago

    Haha, Wow. I didn't even know you could do that with a comment capsule. When I hit that thing I just thought that was the end of the article!

    I guess the O.P. can ignore my previous comments then... (shrugs)

  5. ljsmarketing profile image78
    ljsmarketingposted 17 months ago

    Thanks Everyone. For your constructive criticism,kinda brutal! I have no idea what I am doing. I guess it will hopefully get better as I go hopefully.

    1. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 17 months ago in reply to this

      Spend some time here: http://hubpages.com/learningcenter/contents It will save you much angst in the long run.

  6. Besarien profile image84
    Besarienposted 17 months ago

    Hi ijsmarketing! I left feedback on your page instead of here. Happy New Year all, Besarien

 
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