I'd like feedback on my Hub: Meet The Man Who Made Sofia The First

  1. Elesh profile image85
    Eleshposted 11 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Meet The Man Who Made Sofia The First. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Molly Layton profile image92
      Molly Laytonposted 10 months ago in reply to this

      There are a few grammar and word choice adjustments that could be made. For example, one of your titles is "Craig Story". This should be "Craig's Story." Any online grammar checker should be able to help with that.

      The topics in the hub seem disconnected. Moving topics into a more consistent format could help it read more easily.

      Personally, I'd like to read more about how this former baseball player ended up able to pitch a show to Disney. What work was he doing on TV before? If you know anything about the pitch bible from the show, I'd put that in too. I'd also like to see the list of characters come with a short description of each character. For example, "Queen Mirinda, the nice stepmother."

      I hope this helps.

      1. Elesh profile image85
        Eleshposted 10 months ago in reply to this

        Thanks Molly. I will give it a touch.

 
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