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I'd like feedback on my hub please: Black African Soap

  1. Erzulie LM profile image76
    Erzulie LMposted 11 months ago

    Hello

    Could you please have a look at my hub and tell me what you think http://hubpages.com/style/Black-African-Soap

    I'd be really appreciative of any feedback you can provide smile

    Thanks in advance

    1. AEvans profile image70
      AEvansposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      There are a few typos, along with a handful of run on sentences.  Try not to overstuff your keywords when writing any type of article. Easily corrected with the revision.

      Keyword example:( Black soap).... When used to many times it will not rank well in Google. Plus, repetitiveness becomes mundane. We already know that it is " black soap", so try not to use it as filler words.

      It appears you are writing about two separate topics. ( Black soap) and  (exfoliation) using black soap. I would recommend removing the instructional part of exfoliation and creating  a hub separately about exfoliation using the product.

      Recipe, benefits, etc..... Overall, it is an interesting hub. I found it to be useful and on point.

      1. Erzulie LM profile image76
        Erzulie LMposted 11 months ago in reply to this

        AEvans,

        Thanks so much for your feedback. I've removed a lot of the keywords (I see what you mean about it sounding repetitive!)  I'll correct the typos and run on sentences.

    2. promisem profile image93
      promisemposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      I would switch the second photo with the first photo and display it across the full width of the article. The second photo works well with the second paragraph, but it has more visual appeal than the first one. Switching them and making that second photo bigger will increase visual appeal without hurting the content.

      You might consider expanding the title to something like, "How to Make Black African Soap," so that will rank better in search engines for anyone using that keyword phrase.

      Try using short sentences and one- or two-sentence paragraphs to increase reading ease, which is a search engine factor.

      Can you create another related subtopic? Longer information-dense articles  rank better in search engines.

      1. Erzulie LM profile image76
        Erzulie LMposted 11 months ago in reply to this

        Promisem

        Thanks, this helps a bunch! I'll switch the photos as you suggested and shorten the sentences paragraphs. Thanks also for your advice on search engine optimisation. Fantastic!

        1. promisem profile image93
          promisemposted 11 months ago in reply to this

          Glad to help, Erzulie.

    3. erorantes profile image34
      erorantesposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      I like your article. It is informative. You miss a punctuation at the end of the first sentence. The instructions have a dash at the beginning of the sentences. It is easy to read with numbers. Good luck.

  2. psycheskinner profile image80
    psycheskinnerposted 11 months ago

    Overall I think it is a good hub.  I would suggest maybe adding a small comment on how the potash makes the soap mildly to strongly alkaline --many people think all "natural" soaps have neutral pH but this is certainly not true of black soap.

    1. Erzulie LM profile image76
      Erzulie LMposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      psycheskinner

      Adding information about the soaps ph is a great idea and a good way of expanding the hub! Thanks so much for your input.

  3. Sparrowlet profile image90
    Sparrowletposted 11 months ago

    Nice job! I noticed a few typos too:

    It has a mild nutty smell which is faily neutral, hoever this can be off putting for some.

    But I think the organization is good and the information makes an interesting read. Instead of the heading "Deep Exfoliation Treatment" I would use "How to Make a Deep Exfoliation Treatment", since you then give the recipe. That way, people looking for exfoliation treatments to make at home will likely use those keywords (How to) and find your hub more easily.

    Katharine

    1. Erzulie LM profile image76
      Erzulie LMposted 11 months ago in reply to this

      Katharine

      Ooops! Thanks for pointing out the typos smile
      I'll also change the heading, great feedback, thanks again.

 
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