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I'd like feedback on my Hub: AMMYS GREEK SALAD

  1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
    Amruth Prabhuposted 5 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub AMMYS GREEK SALAD (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image95
      theraggededgeposted 5 months ago in reply to this

      Many typing errors need fixing.

      http://hubpages.com/learningcenter/contents

      1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
        Amruth Prabhuposted 5 months ago in reply to this

        Ok but was new to site ...want to post a hub as soon as possible so published a in hurry
        Thanks will pay attention to it

    2. sukhneet profile image54
      sukhneetposted 5 months ago in reply to this

      I think you have used a lot of CAPITALIZATION that needs fixing.

      1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
        Amruth Prabhuposted 5 months ago in reply to this

        Thanks

    3. NatashaL profile image87
      NatashaLposted 4 months ago in reply to this

      As a fellow "newbie" who writes recipe Hubs, I welcome you.  big_smile  I'd like to approach this as both a recipe sharer and a former English teacher.

      Some general impressions:

      *  Typing in ALL-CAPS is considered shouting.  If you want to emphasize certain parts of your content, use bold text or underlining.
      *  A recipe should be written matter-of-factly. All you do in a recipe is list the steps.  If you want to offer suggestions or nutritional advice, do that in a separate subsection of your Hub.
      *  Recipe ingredients should be listed in the order they are used.
      *  Many readers appreciate nutrition information.  I recommend searching for "calorie calculator recipe" to find online tools that will show you the information you'd find on a nutrition label.
      *  Ingredients in a recipe should be written in lowercase. 
      *  Proofread this Hub for misplaced punctuation and spaces ("Assorted Lettuce, RomanIceberg LolloRoso Rocket l)ettuce" caught my eye right away.  You've also spelled alfalfa about three different ways.  " sugar syrup, or one tea spoon castor sugar  Olive oil, salad oil can also b used")
      *  What is thaina paste?  Since this ingredient is unfamiliar to many, it might help to explain what it is.
      *  What are we supposed to do with the tomatoes?  You mention that we can use either cherry tomatoes or regular tomatoes, but you should specify that regular tomatoes should be diced or cut into wedges.
      *  Should olives be whole or sliced?  Do you keep the red part in the green olives?
      *  Since the feta cheese is optional, you should state this in the list of ingredients.  It would look like 50 gms feta cheese, optional
      *  The abbreviation for grams is g.
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      Suggestions:

      *  Rather than tell us that you're going to explain how to wash salad greens in the future, post a video about it in this Hub.
      *  Ask a friend to read your Hub before you try to publish it.  Sometimes we don't notice our own mistakes.
      *  Make each step of the recipe a separate bullet point.  Too much is included in each step.
      *  Read other recipe Hubs that have passed the QAP, especially those that have earned Editors' Choice awards.
      *  Explain each step thoroughly. 

      If you don't take time to proofread your work and make sure it's clear and easy to read before you publish it, readers won't take time to read your work.  They'll move on.

      1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
        Amruth Prabhuposted 4 months ago in reply to this

        Hi
        Thank-you for your feedback .I have realized my mistakes it was my first post so pls excuse me for my mistakes I surely rectify in my new hub which I will post very soon
        Thank you for proper feedback will appreciate this in future also

  2. 81
    corinnposted 5 months ago

    I agree that there are several typing and/or spelling errors, however, I believe you should consider reaching all of your readers.  One way this may be possible is to use both measurement systems (many U.S. citizens will not use this recipe simple because they do not want to do the conversions, as the U.S. does not use the metric system).  If you make a T-chart, and use the metric system on one side, and the U.S. measurement system (cups, teaspoons, tablespoons, etc.), you will most like reach many more readers.

    1. 81
      corinnposted 5 months ago in reply to this

      I meant "most likely," not "most like."  See, we all have "typos" sometimes!

      1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
        Amruth Prabhuposted 5 months ago in reply to this

        Thank you will definitely work on it

  3. ddsurfsca profile image77
    ddsurfscaposted 5 months ago

    I think many more people would relate to a recipe that called for one cup of this and a quarter cup of that.  Not many people I know use a metric scale in the kitchen.  Also, if you refer to a cookbook, you will find a regular recipe format that follows the ingredients.  For example if the recipe calls for ---
    1 pound of hamburger
    3 t. salt
    4 c water
    Then you will find the directions that follow as this----
    brown hamburger and set aside to cool
    In large pot bring water to boil, adding the salt.

    Do you see what I mean?  You have to teach the person reading the recipe step by step how to put it together.  This way it is more pleasing to the eye, in a format that they are used to, and easier to follow.

    Then, I agree with the others, correct the typos and other stuff.

    1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
      Amruth Prabhuposted 5 months ago in reply to this

      Thank you so much I think I will study on it thourghly and the give my new recipe
      Then you please like n comment on it
      Thanks once again

  4. tlcs profile image83
    tlcsposted 4 months ago

    Hi Amruth, your salad sounds lovely. I would definitely suggest starting with why your salad is so tasty and yummy and then I would go through your work and check your spelling and grammar. Hope that helps.

    1. NatashaL profile image87
      NatashaLposted 4 months ago in reply to this

      You're right...the salad does sound delicious. 

      Amruth:  If you would like my help in making your recipe easier to read, just let me know.  We newcomers should help one another out.  big_smile

      1. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
        Amruth Prabhuposted 4 months ago in reply to this

        yes sure i really need your help and will also msg you for any future queries
        pls b online on  tuesday
        thanks
        amruth 
        prabhu

    2. Amruth Prabhu profile image60
      Amruth Prabhuposted 4 months ago in reply to this

      Thanks will work on it

 
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