I'd like feedback on my Hub: Star Of The Records - Frank Sinatra

  1. Elsie Hagley profile image79
    Elsie Hagleyposted 7 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Star Of The Records - Frank Sinatra. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image93
    Rupert Taylorposted 7 weeks ago

    The first thing that occurs to me is why are you writing this? The information is very well known; indeed, if you Google "Frank Sinatra" you get more than 20 million hits. That's a lot of competition for your article.

    Capital letters appear at random and inappropriately.

    Following is a run-on sentence with a couple of grammar errors with corrections in brackets.

    "In my younger days he was the apple of my eye, I could listen for hours to his voice, which was played on the 78 records, big untidy things, the one's (ones) before 45 records came out, in those day's (days) there were no DVD (DVDs) or any of the modern devices to listen to his voice."

    This ought to be two or even three sentences.

    Your images need to be credited as to source. Do you have permission to use them?

 
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