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My first poem on hp. Did I do it right?

  1. TessSchlesinger profile image91
    TessSchlesingerposted 5 weeks ago

    I don't usually publish poetry on hubpages because, from experience, fiction and poetry don't do to well. However, with so much happening that appears to be propelling us to WWIII, I felt I wanted to share this poem.

    http://hubpages.com/literature/A-Poem-a … ible-Thing

    My issue is that I'm not sure how to best present poems on HP.

    What works best?

    Thanks.

    1. Jodah profile image86
      Jodahposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

      I just read your poem and the presentation is fine. You have added additional text which is good. HubPages likes you to add a video but not essential. That's up to you.

      1. TessSchlesinger profile image91
        TessSchlesingerposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

        Okat. Thanks  I would love to be able to do a video reciting the poem but have no idea how to do it.

        1. Jodah profile image86
          Jodahposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

          You can video yourself reciting it, put it on YouTube and then copy and save the link on the hub. Saying that, I have not done that. I have had other people recite my poems on YouTube videos though.

          1. TessSchlesinger profile image91
            TessSchlesingerposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

            That's just it! I wouldn't know how to video myself, and I'm very camera shy. What I would like to do is do some sort of power point presentation, do a voice over of the poem, and then convert it into a video. Unhappily, I don't know how to do that.

            Who does your videos for you?

            1. Jodah profile image86
              Jodahposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

              I submitted one poem to a writers festival where you could have it read by a professional actor and put on YouTube for $15 or they'd make a short movie out of it for I think $150. However since then, my son reads them and puts them on YouTube for me. He doesn't video himself just chooses an appropriate picture and does a voice over.

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      Farlin Ninangposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

      I just read your poem from your given link and I must say that it lacks of something. I can't just really directly say what's lacking but check your poem again and again and you'll see the missing piece that I have said. But then, good choice of words.

      1. TessSchlesinger profile image91
        TessSchlesingerposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

        I assume you're a troll because you joined 35 hours ago. Your opinion has little worth when you have no idea why you're saying something. I take it as malice.

        What I was asking about was the presentation of the poem - how it is laid out.

        Jodah gave me the kind of information I was looking for.

  2. Will Apse profile image90
    Will Apseposted 5 weeks ago

    My mother groaned my father wept.
    Into the dangerous world I leapt:
    Helpless, naked, piping loud;
    Like a fiend hid in a cloud.

    If you think the above poem is OK, you should forget about poetry right now, lol.

  3. Marisa Wright profile image93
    Marisa Wrightposted 5 weeks ago

    The last link to more rhyming poetry is unlikely to be approved, as it's not related to the main topic of the Hub.

    1. TessSchlesinger profile image91
      TessSchlesingerposted 5 weeks ago in reply to this

      Aha. Thank you. I will remove it.

 
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