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I'd like feedback on my Hub: 3 Weightloss Supplements Proven To Help You Lose Th

  1. DeborahNessmith profile image80
    DeborahNessmithposted 8 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub 3 Weightloss Supplements Proven To Help You Lose Those Unwanted Pounds (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image94
      theraggededgeposted 8 months ago in reply to this

      As Rupert says, this is not a good topic: https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/Lear … ted-topics

      You are also using clearly marked copyright images. Are you prepared for a lawsuit or a large invoice for illegal use? https://hubpageshelp.com/media/Learning … -image-use

      My advice is to delete the hub and start afresh with a new and interesting topic. You can use free online checkers, such as Grammarly to help you improve your writing.

      Make good use of the Learning Center - all you need to know to get going is there. https://hubpageshelp.com

      Good luck.

      1. DeborahNessmith profile image80
        DeborahNessmithposted 8 months ago in reply to this

        Thank you. I'm not sure which images you're saying is copyrighted, but thanks for the heads up. I use Pexel for my images and YouTube for videos. Again thank you for your input and links for information on hubpages.

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image94
    Rupert Taylorposted 8 months ago

    Hi Deborah

    Issues? There are a few.

    First the topic. The Internet is awash with weight loss advice, and almost all of it is useless. The soundest advice I've ever come across is from Michael Pollan who has written many books on food - "Eat Food. Not too much. Mostly plants." Most of the weight loss supplements peddled by the likes of Dr. Oz have no effect other than to fatten the bank accounts of those selling them.

    With regard to garcinia cambogia, Women’s Health magazine reports it is “linked to multiple hospitalizations, says medical weight-loss expert Sue Decotiis, M.D.”

    Off my hobby-horse now and putting on my editor's hat.

    Your title is much too long, and there are problems with grammar and spelling. Here is a sample with corrections in brackets.

    "If you're starting a weightloss (weight loss is two words) journey and your (you are or you're) feeling overwhelmed, I know your struggle. After the birth of my children, I'm starting over at the ground the floor. However, the the (two thes) trial and error part is over, I've got three weightloss supplments (weight loss supplements) that's (that are) proven to help shed those unwanted pounds.

    1. DeborahNessmith profile image80
      DeborahNessmithposted 8 months ago in reply to this

      Thank you. I appreciate your feedback.

 
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