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I'd like feedback on my Hub: How to be a Photographer

  1. Gwenneth Leane profile image86
    Gwenneth Leaneposted 8 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub How to be a Photographer. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Glenis Rix profile image88
      Glenis Rixposted 8 weeks ago in reply to this

      You have written much of the hub in the first person. I think that this makes it  more like a blog than an article. I would try de-personalising it.

    2. Jason mackenzie profile image87
      Jason mackenzieposted 8 weeks ago in reply to this

      Hi, overall informative, but I observed some grammatical errors. For example, the 2nd heading - 'The first settlers in hard times ate them' - wouldn't it sound better if framed as - The first settlers ate them when times were hard. '

      Another one is this sentence 'Rule three places the horizon either above...'.. Since other rules are followed by a colon, this one should be too, for uniformity sake.

      Hope it helps, thanks, regards...

  2. chasmac profile image99
    chasmacposted 8 weeks ago

    The photo of your camera has a copyright symbol and name - That's not allowed. Even if you got permission to use the photo from the owner, it can't be used with that writing on it. It's the equivalent of an identifying watermark, so not acceptable according to the HP rules. The problem isn't the writing itself; your first photo has writing but that's fine as it's part of the image.

    Another possible cause is the specification list for the camera. If you wrote that out and worded it yourself, that's fine, but if you copied and pasted from a website, it will show up as duplicate content. The list itself might also be seen as irrelevant. Your article is about becoming a photographer, not about the functions on one particular camera.

  3. Rupert Taylor profile image93
    Rupert Taylorposted 8 weeks ago

    I only scanned your article and noticed several errors.

    "Rule Two: Layers of different colour, forground and background" Should be foreground.

    "Camera –Artists Palette"  Camera – Artist's Palette 

    "•The first Step" step should not be capitalized

    I'm sure there are other errors that are getting in the way of QAP acceptance. Try running your copy through a program such as Grammarly - it's free - to catch these mistakes.

  4. Gwenneth Leane profile image86
    Gwenneth Leaneposted 8 weeks ago

    Thank you for your comments, I appreciate them.

  5. Jason mackenzie profile image87
    Jason mackenzieposted 7 weeks ago

    Most welcome. Do check out my hubs whenever you have time and leave comments. Thanks, regards...

    1. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 7 weeks ago in reply to this

      Jason, requesting that people view your hubs is not encouraged - otherwise we'd all be doing it.

  6. Jason mackenzie profile image87
    Jason mackenzieposted 7 weeks ago

    Hi theraggededge, okay - noted. Just for clarification, it was not meant as a marketing gimmick but for seeking opinion from fresh set of eyes. As writers we all tend to miss a few crucial points which are immediately apparent to another person going through it. One way of overcoming this is to request someone to go through what you have written and provide feedback/comments. But anyway, sincere apologies, thanks, regards...

    1. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 7 weeks ago in reply to this

      It's fine if you need to improve one hub for whatever reason, just ask here and post the link. However, best not to respond to someone else's request for feedback with an 'invitation to view'.

  7. Annie Wright profile image80
    Annie Wrightposted 7 weeks ago

    Hi,
    I noticed your title is How To Be A .... but you seem to center on a camera with its specifics and if it was copied you will need to quote to give credit to where the information came from. Try and remove some of the first person. I also noticed a few grammatical errors, easy to fix with Google tool grammar and spelling. Maybe use a flowchart to sort out the layout, rearrange the body of the article as I got the impression that it was more of a blog than an article. Very nice pictures and it was interesting to read.
    Annie

  8. paperfacets profile image89
    paperfacetsposted 7 weeks ago

    First get the bio written for this Hub. Second a picture from you of your camera is good and cut out the whole specs list. No need for that because the reader can get that at a buying site and you want to highlight "How To Be"... not the camera.
    Be sure to gives specifics of why you use this camera if a Amazon module stays. Put it at the end of the How to tips.
    For easier reading I would put each of the Four rules under the corresponding photo you are including afterwards. That way the photo illustration is visible while the rule is being talked about.   

    See if you can pare down the sentences to make the paragraphs easier to read. The subject matter is good and gives important tips for anyone who wants to be serious about photography. When you submit be sure to think about each of the 11 or so criteria the submission process has you answer.

 
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