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   Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub "True Paranormal Experiences: Includes Messages from Edwin Hubble and Others" (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   
   
   
   Dear friends this hub is not published I don't know why if grammatical error alone is the problem then it can be fixed so please tell me if there is one. If the reason is other than this I don't know what can be done about that all I have to tell is this hub is real and serious for it consists of message  from spirits who live in the world of afterlife whom I personally met. They are human like us, they are our ancestors and they have the right to be heard. My hub is purely about sharing and celebrating life of these souls. We have to come  out of our time and think what life was like in this world when they were alive. In this hub I met lot of authors who are my favorite they spoke little may be it sounds simple but it is from them. What I do is once in a lifetime opportunity and life is not forever in this world. God loves you all.Thank you.

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      Jason mackenzieposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, starting from the title - "True Paranormal Experiences: Includes Messages from Edwin Hubble and Others" - Since you are already using a colon, the word 'includes' can be excluded.
      
      Yes, there are grammatical errors and all of them sound more or less the same, making it monotonous for the reader. Maybe if you describe how you communicate with all these people, it could render the hub more interesting.
      
      Hope this has been helpful, thanks, regards...

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   chasmacposted 6 years ago

   Yes, your Hub has grammatical errors very similar to your previous Hubs. Look at your first sentence. "Dear friends I owe you all an explanation first we are dealing with the subject of paranormal experience here." This should be two sentences separated with a period/full stop after "first", and then a space and a capital letter to start the next one. This is your most common fault in this Hub and in your previous Hubs. Also remove the quotes from your title.
   
   You also need to make sure the messages are consistent with known facts.
   
   Queen Elizabeth the Queen Mother says "I am no more Queen of England...". She was NEVER the Queen of England. She was the wife of the King of England (actually of the UK and Commonwealth), and her official title was Queen Consort until the death of her husband, after which she was Queen Elizabeth the Queen Mother. So although "Queen" is in her title, she was never Queen of England, and I can't imagine her claiming that she ever was.
   
   Roy Chapman Andrews introduces himself as Andrews Roy Chapman then signs himself off as Andrews Chapman. Skeptical readers will think that if he can't get his own name right, why should they believe any message from him.
   
   Jim Corbett did indeed kill man-eating tigers in India for a while during his earlier days, but he's far more famous as someone who later became a celebrated conservationist and wildlife photographer, Corbett National Park is named after him. He did a lot of good conservation work, yet all he can mention here is his 'frightening career' protecting people from ferocious creatures that were a threat to civilisation. A threat to civilisation? Obviously not! They were a threat to Indian villagers, not civilisation. Why on earth (or in that other place) would he claim such a thing?
   
   Now, while you have enough grammar errors and inconsistencies to fail QAP, I can't be sure if the actual topic is also a problem in the eyes of HubPages. As theraggededge pointed out, anyone (whether psychic or not), could spend all day writing hubs with messages from beyond the grave. You could have a thousand Hubs in no time, all earning advertising revenue. I'm sure HubPages wouldn't allow that because you can't show that they're genuine messages.

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   Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

   Dear chasmac and Jason mackenzie,
   I am happy you took your time to tell about the errors in this hub i will rectify it. If you personally believe me and have faith that is more than enough to me. My eyes have to run with the alphabets they are pointing along with a faint voice talking inside my head. You see I talk to them with my mind no moving lips that's the way spirits talk.
   
   I can't change what Jim Corbett said it should remain the same. I also have no idea about Queen Elizabeth whatever she said will remain the same you will do the same thing if you are in my place. What I am doing here and the facts in the internet are two different things. I am recording my conversation with these spirits by meeting them in person. I look at their eyes and communicate. I will stay in their memories forever I think they will remember me as someone they met from our world.
   
   We are in a massive library hall and we all are like books from different sections. Our thoughts are like ocean of knowledge submitted here. I am just  a small book from history section for I bring messages from the past back to our world. Since we represent different books here we also need a pen to write these books but the pen as two sides  one end we can write an entire novel and the other end  we lose all the privilege to express our thoughts.
   
   I have watched 41 animated movies with Walt Disney spirit till date and hoping to make this into 100. He will remember me for showing him animated movies. He enjoys it. He saw Jungle book movie for the first time which was his last work he died during  pre-production stage. I told him that without Walt Disney we won't be watching many wonderful movies which still run under his production name today.

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   Like I told you before, I think the repeated titles and similarities with your previous hubs are the problem. You are going to find difficulty getting them past QAP.
   
   You really have to get the facts right before you press 'publish'. Your guys are playing with you.
   
   You might think about publishing these on your own blog. I bet you'd earn lots of money and become really famous.

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   Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

   I think we are again going out of the subject paranormal belief and experience. A book is getting misplaced in this library. I met so many different people everyone are talking differently based on their life experiences how can it sound same. This hub consist of messages from 16 different people.You are hearing them talk because of me its a gift for you and everyone here from me. Can you suggest a different kind of title for this hub. If you are looking for cheerful entertainment from my hubs then I am sorry for my hubs are serious and slightly grim. Lets hope the QAP will be kind enough to let my hubs reach my audience.
   
   I see lots of people are watching me here and I want to tell everyone that my hubs are very very real. I am doing something that everyone can't do. My goal is to meet famous people and bring their messages here. I am creating a window for everyone to meet people from the other side. I love history and to meet people from the past is an amazing experience. I am going to meet kings and queens of ancient Egypt. Wait for my next exciting hub soon.
   
   One thing I have to tell everyone is that I will not be able to see these people again after my time is done with this world and no more messages from me again. That's the real reason for posting bubbles of hub here but don't worry I will see that we meet many people as possible. Have a good day friends and take care.
   
   Hey do we miss the 1980's life? I see Michael Jackson everyday.
   
   Whispering Night

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   Look, I'm not talking about your hub content now. Paranormal experience has nothing to do with it. I'm telling you **why your hubs are failing QAP and not getting published**.
   
   1. Title
   2. Grammar
   3. Accuracy
   4. Image attribution.
   
   If you want them published, you have to address those issues. If you don't abide by the rules and guidelines, no-one is going to be able to read them.
   
   You also need to understand that internal (HubPages) traffic means nothing. You must be able to attract external, search engine traffic. Hence the requirement for unique titles.
   
   Here is the criteria for a hub to pass QAP. Can you say that yours meet the requirements?
   
   "A clear and specific title backed up by a fully-developed message
   Generous use of concrete facts and figures to back up arguments or assertions
   Helpful and abundant supportive media such as images, videos, polls, quizzes, tables, and maps
   Clear, reader-friendly structure (descriptive subheadings)
   Visually attractive content (both regarding media and layout)
   No unrelated links or other spammy elements
   No spelling or grammatical mistakes"
   
   https://hubpageshelp.com/features/Learn … tured-Hubs
   
   However, you can break all the rules you like, and call your articles anything you want to - on your own site. You could start a Blogger blog - it would be perfect for this kind of material.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   Precisely what the Raggededge says but I'll go further, and this is said with kindness. If you truly believe you are in communication with dead people you really need to seek medical help. If, on the other hand, you are trying to prank us it's time to stop. This has gone far enough. For myself, I won't be visiting your posting any more.

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   Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

   To Rupert Taylor,
   
   Thank you for being very kind to me.You are free to make your choice. But why are you discouraging me and others. We have to behave like gentlemen here and we have to be very careful with our language and words. I am focusing only on people who believe me. This will be our last conversation and we will end it here for our own good. As for me I am just a hubber presenting a subject to people.
   
   To theraggededge,
   
   Forget about personal blogs we are inside Hubpages and many people are watching what you are saying here. I don't think Hubpages will accept someone advising like this. The feedbacks have helped me to some extent. Thank you for that. My Biggest concern is grammar mistakes.  You have the ability to make people to agree with you. No one is breaking any sort of rules here. You have spoken about every possible errors in my hub as well as for all the future hubs I will be posting that means you don't have much to say anymore you will be repeating yourself again and again. Your are not talking on behalf of  hubpages or anyone here its just you alone. Since you are talking about starting own site It will be good you stop visting my hubs like Rupert Taylor and no more conversation between us.  Hubpages have been very kind and supportive towards me I am very grateful for that. Now I need some long rest, peace of mind and take some time for myself.Bye.
   
   Dear young hubbers I think it is natural to find critics in every hub I am corrected now. My approach towards my hubs and the way I communicate is changed. Lets get back to my subject. Have a nice day everyone.

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Firstly, I'm afraid you do not get to decide who participates in the forums or who visits your hubs.
      
      Your subject is How. To. Get. Your. Hub. Published. We're not here to praise you and tell you how wonderful you are. Neither are we here to discuss the paranormal. That isn't what **this** section of the forum, 'Improving your hub', is about.
      
      You have asked for feedback as to why your hub isn't being published and featured. I am giving you that feedback.
      
      My advice comes directly from HubPages' guidelines so it is good if 'young hubbers' read it and understand it. I doubt very much if one single person at HP thinks I am giving you bad advice. However, you are free to ignore it and for your hubs to sit in your account unseen.
      
      If you don't credit your images correctly, you are ignoring the guidelines.
      If you don't include accurate facts, you are ignoring the guidelines.
      If you repeat the same title over and over, you are ignoring the guidelines.
      If you don't fix the grammar, you are ignoring the guidelines.
      
      Yes, I feel like I am repeating myself because you aren't paying attention. You are like many new hubbers, who believe that they are the exception; that HubPages' requirements don't apply to them because they are 'special'. You think you know better. You don't.
      
      My last piece of advice to you, if you don't want the same response to every hub you write, is NOT to ask in the forum for feedback in the first place.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

   TheRaggedEdge is giving you good advice. If you decide to ignore her advice, you will NEVER get published on HubPages.  It's your choice.

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    But she is advising me like starting start my own personal blog which means I shouldn't be inside the hubpages at all. How do you justify this as an advice?
    
    To know more about me visit my profile.

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       chasmacposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       She's simply telling you that you're going to have a lot of problems publishing these Hubs because they don't  comply with HubPages' requirements.
       If you publish them on your own blog, you won't have any restrictions. You can publish your articles with all the faulty grammar and factual inconsistencies that we've pointed out and not a single one will be rejected. She's not trying to kick you out of HubPages, and I assume she doesn't care one way or the other whether you're here or not; she's just pointing out the obvious.

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       theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       No, it does not mean 'you shouldn't be inside HubPages'. You make it sound like I think you should be kicked out. What utter nonsense.
       
       It means that your material would ***do better*** on your own niche blog than on a magazine platform like this one. It means that you can keep doing what you are doing without being held up by Quality Assessment. It means that you would have complete editorial control. It means that you could build up a specialised site completely devoted to your particular skill.
       
       That is still a valid and reasonable suggestion. As always, you are free to ignore it and carry on as you are.
       
       I have a niche blog. The material on it wouldn't do very well here. It's too detailed and specific.

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       Marisa Wrightposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       The fact that you can't understand her advice tells me that your English is not good enough to write on HubPages.  Chasmac has explained it simply for you.

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    I like the way Chasmac talks to me and I understand very clearly what she says.Thank you for the help Chasmac.

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    Dear theraggededge,
    
    We are friends now lets support each other no hard feelings. As a friend I am talking to you alone forget the rest of the world. I do see spirits and the messages are real no one in my family or people I live with know about this ability I have. This is a secret I have to keep. I am sharing these messages here only and I can meet any unknown spirit it need not be a famous person all the time I call them because they are popular with our world and you also have wikipedia to know the recorded history of their life. Grammatical error as nothing to do with my communication with the spirits. I am only trying to talk directly not in the form of suppressed essay. Now you can tell about this to your world but I will still remain a unknown person. I am only trying to make these poor souls be heard again. When I say them that their message didn't reach the world they look sad. This is not my hub at all it belongs to them. Hope now you care for them not for me. Take care.
    
    Your friend
    
    Praveen.

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       theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       
       
       Praveen, can you explain what HubPages is?

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    Its all about people writing quality first class essay and seriously earn money from ads posted on their pages am I correct?
    
    Back to my subject naa I am just joking. What we will become in the end of our life. I will tell you one thing there is no piano in heaven to play music so listen to all the music you want in this world.

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       theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       Yes, that's correct. So in order to for HubPages to display those adverts, articles must comply with certain standards. That is what we've been trying to help you with. Arguing and saying that your hubs need not adhere to those standards is pointless.
       
       There is no 'back to your subject'. This is not the forum to discuss your personal beliefs. To do that, you can go here: http://hubpages.com/forum/20
       
       There is an audience ready and willing to discuss paranormal experience waiting for you.
       
       You're welcome.

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    Thank you thank you!!!!!!

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    Thank you Thank you!!

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    Whispering Nightposted 6 years ago

    I am sorry for the extra thank you something went wrong here it didn't display the first Thank you.

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       theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

       Thank you

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