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I'd like feedback on my Hub: The American Pickers Explore a Gilded Age Castle

  1. Michael J Davis profile image60
    Michael J Davisposted 3 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,
    I need more help than a simple "fix the article" I guess I'm a little dense,so
    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub The American Pickers Explore a Gilded Age Castle (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image95
      theraggededgeposted 3 months ago in reply to this

      Hi again Michael,

      HubPages is looking for informative, magazine-style articles so I have to say, and I don't mean to be harsh, that you are writing 'blah' topics. There's nothing exciting, or new, or attention grabbing. What's the point of writing a watered-down version of a Wikipedia article?

      When you write a Hub, you should be thinking about answering some sort of question that a reader might be asking. You have to bring something new to the subject. Tell us things we can't find out on Wikipedia. Or present it from a completely new angle. Or bring your own personal experience into it.

      The links are probably preventing your hub passing QAP.

    2. NateB11 profile image92
      NateB11posted 3 months ago in reply to this

      I had to read your article, because I watch the show. I think the article has potential because the show is fairly popular and people do search out specific episodes; a simple search on Google brings up searches for American Pickers and locations they've explored, in auto-suggest.

      At any rate, however, I think it would be good to change the approach you have taken in this article. I think there needs to be more about the show in the article; some kind of insight into Mike and Frank and their funny idiosyncrasies. The article is about the show, so I think there needs to be a bit more of a review of the show and the two main guys on the show, but in a way that related to the mansion they explore in the show. Maybe talk a bit more about what they do in this particular episode, how they react to things they see, etc.

      Also, you might want to proof-read the article, I saw a couple sentences that were a little hard to make sense of; mostly the writing is good, but I think it could use some re-working.

    3. Annie Wright profile image80
      Annie Wrightposted 3 months ago in reply to this

      One part that caught my attention was when you mentioned the fact a lot of old items left behind that really don't belong there and that is where the American Pickers come in. What are some of the old items left behind? What can you tell the reader about the old items? Are the old items worth money? Do the old items need to be restored? You need to do some research into letting the reader know about the old items. When you briefly mention something like the old items and only say that where the stars of the show come in is very boring to the reader, you really should explain more in detail.  I also saw a few sentences that were hard to read. To make a good article you really need to research information as I got the impression it was like a remake of a Wikipedia article. I don't mean to sound harsh but just trying to help you improve the article. Can you locate pictures of some of the old items? What about using a callout or maybe a quote from one of the main characters?

 
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