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I'd like feedback on my Hub: Mental Health: An enigma

  1. profile image59
    peachylifeposted 9 days ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Mental Health: An enigma (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Barbara Kay profile image85
      Barbara Kayposted 9 days ago in reply to this

      I don't have time to read the entire hub right now, but what I did read was well written. What I noticed right away was that it needs to be divided up into different groups of text. Give each group a subtitle. This makes it easier to read online and the search engines like this also.

      Try a title that people are more likely to use in a search also.

    2. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 9 days ago in reply to this

      Hi there, welcome to HubPages.

      First of all, you might need to reconsider your title. Nowhere in your article do you address the premise that mental health is an enigma. Titles should also be in title case.

      Then you need to give the piece a thorough proofread. There's nothing major that I can see but just make sure you capitalise nouns like Tinder and the World Health Organisation.

      Talking of the WHO, you mention an article but don't reference it. At the very least you should mention its title, author, and the date published.

      Watch out for long and rambling sentences. Go through it and try to pick them up. You could use an online checker such as Grammarly or Hemingway.

      Also be careful of making sweeping generalisations without evidence to back them up. A lot of the statements you claim as fact are a matter of opinion. Mental health issues are caused by many factors and not because 'people can't get a grip on their brain'. I have not heard it often said that "dependency is sign of the weak".

      You need to cite the source of your images and make sure that they are legal-to-use, i.e. they have a Creative Commons license or are in the Public Domain. You can't take images off the internet and republish them without checking.

      You can probably get this article approved with a little bit of judicious editing. Good luck!

      Edit: Just saw Barbara's response. She's right, you need to use multiple text capsules and also remove that poll from the top of the page.

  2. Dan W Miller profile image85
    Dan W Millerposted 8 days ago

    He's a troll! They sign on for a few days, insult, hack then leave. Don't be so naive.

    1. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 8 days ago in reply to this

      What are you talking about? There's a hub, did you read it? Who's insulting? Who's hacking?

 
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