I'd like feedback on my Hub: hair how to grow hair faster

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   Preety Prabhaposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub hair how to grow hair faster (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      Marketing Meritposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Where to start?
      
      You have used capital letters where they shouldn't be and not used them where you should have done.
      You have too many photos and it is unclear if you have permission to use these.
      You have 3 Amazon products, without any form of description.
      At the end, there is a link to buy red wine. This is totally unrelated to your hub and is considered spammy.
      The hub focuses more on home remedies for hair, rather than its title.
      Also, your grammar needs improving.
      
      Hope this helps, but this article will need a lot of work before it will pass QAP.

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   pen promulgatesposted 6 years ago

   Hi
   Your hub has an excellent potential but the writing needs much improvement.
   1) There are many grammatical errors throughout.
   2) Sentences don't have logic.
   Some examples:
   You started with a singular subject (everyone), but used a plural verb (want).
   You don't need the word 'also' and comma in the statement 'you must have gorgeous hair also, because it is the most important part.'
   The statement 'There are lots of people, no I think every single person( except those who don't care about their looks) expend a huge amount of money on hair products.' is weird in construction. In the above sentence, you can erase the line 'no I think every single person.' If you still prefer to keep it that way, put a Comma after 'no' and a period before people.
   Before expend there needs to be the pronoun 'who.' Spend is the better word.
   3) Punctuation is incorrect at many places.
   4) There are many sentences like 'Just keep going going and going until no one suggest us the better one or you will find the new products. We use huge varieties of product and some times also get the results,' that have no logical connection. They lack sense.
   Please proofread the article.
   Read it loudly. You will sense how weird it sounds.
   You can use apps like Grammarly and Hemingway to correct grammar and punctuation errors.
   5) Don't capitalized unnecessarily.
   6) The images you have used, are they legal to use? You can get penalized. You can only use images that has cco license (creative common license).
   Use websites like pexels and pixabay for images.
   
   Hope these help.
   Good luck.

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