I'd like feedback on my Hub: My Loving English Teacher

  1. sunilkunnoth2012 profile image64
    sunilkunnoth2012posted 4 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub My Loving English Teacher. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 4 weeks ago in reply to this

      Hi Sunil,

      First of all, don't publish your teacher's full name. Call him Mr R. or something.

      Don't abbreviate words like magazine to 'mag', or advertisement to 'ad'. Don't use & instead of 'and'. It's lazy typing, and looks unprofessional.

      " the spoon-fed English medium products" What does that mean?

      There are grammatical issues throughout the article. What you have to remember is when writing an article around, or based on, the topic of language, you really have to get it right. Here's an example:

      "How can I? I was jobless and penniless. Still somehow I did arrange, though a little bit late, and collected the materials. I read it and went through the lessons seriously. The 'tenses' was what most mainly concreted in my mind."

      "How could I? I was jobless and penniless. Somehow I managed it, though a little bit late, and collected the material. I read it, and went through the lessons carefully.  I paid most attention to the tenses."

      That last sentence of yours doesn't make sense. I've changed it to what I think it means, but I could be wrong.

      Watch out for unnecessary capitalization: diary, representative, etc.

      Remove the parentheses from "I didn't accept his job...." and correct it to "I didn't accept his job because I had one already." Had, not got. You can't use a parentheses enclosed phrase in a sentence all by itself. It has to form part of another sentence.

      Okay, that's enough for you to be getting on with for now. There are lots more errors right the way through. Try reading the text out loud or pasting it into an online checker like Grammarly (though it won't pick them all up).

      One you've done that, come back and let us know. Someone will take another look.

      It's a nice article and I'm sure you can get it to pass QAP with a little work.

      1. sunilkunnoth2012 profile image64
        sunilkunnoth2012posted 4 weeks ago in reply to this

        Hi Madam,

        Thank you so much for your kind help. You have given me some helpful tips. I will do the needful. I am happy to hear that my article is nice. English is my my 2nd language so naturally I  have its own issues. Anyhow tips from great people like you are helpful and most welcome. Thank you once again.

 
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