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Very first hub, would appreciate feedback and advise for a better one.

  1. jlt1971 profile image60
    jlt1971posted 7 years ago

    Hello! I just submitted my first hub, and I'd love some critques, and advise on how to make my next one better. Thank You!

    1. Susana S profile image91
      Susana Sposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      I really enjoyed it - well done! My only tip would be to break the text up into more paragraphs and maybe put in some sub headings. It's just cos I find a long bit of text hard to read on the computer - don't know if it's just me though smile

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        \Brenda Scullyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        i find that too it is because we are  not as young as once we were........

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 7 years ago

    read it, enjoyed, am now your fan..... just keep keeping on ,would be my advice

  3. tksensei profile image60
    tksenseiposted 7 years ago

    I liked it!

  4. emievil profile image85
    emievilposted 7 years ago

    You're off to a great start and you have a new fan!

  5. Helen Cater profile image60
    Helen Caterposted 7 years ago

    You have done really well with your first hub. Well done

  6. EYEAM4ANARCHY profile image94
    EYEAM4ANARCHYposted 7 years ago

    It's a nice story and you told it pretty well. My one suggestion would to break up the one giant paragraph into two or even three smaller paragraphs.

    Also, I might have a bit of a tendency to go overboard, but I think the extras (I.E. pictures, videos, polls, links, etc.) add a lot to hubs. They definitely increase your view duration, which helps your ranking.

  7. Ronaldos profile image80
    Ronaldosposted 7 years ago

    I diggit !! Keep the good work coming !