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  1. Y.Cry Overit profile image59
    Y.Cry Overitposted 7 years ago
  2. SandyMcCollum profile image80
    SandyMcCollumposted 7 years ago

    You have a real knack with words, I like your writing. But I don't understand what you're asking, if these are okay or what should you do? If you're asking for a review, I'd say they're good, but I don't have more than that to offer you. <3

  3. Y.Cry Overit profile image59
    Y.Cry Overitposted 7 years ago

    Thank you Sandy.
      This is the first time I have put any fiction writing up anywhere. If it is aweful I want to know, or how I can improve it. Thank you for reading it.

    1. OregonWino profile image85
      OregonWinoposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      I liked it!  I agree, you have a way with words.  You might want to think about doing a short intro paragraph though to let people know that they are about to read a short story, or to give background etc.

  4. Y.Cry Overit profile image59
    Y.Cry Overitposted 7 years ago

    The intro paragraph is a good idea. Thank you.

 
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