Would Appreciate Some Feedback on my New Hub

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   Health Wiseposted 14 years ago

   I just finished my new hub last week about common phobias and was wondering if any of ye could give me some feedback.Ive a lot of info added already but it may need something else? Constructive criticism appreciated
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/commonphobias

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      prettydarkhorseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      i commented on it, it is a good hub!

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         Health Wiseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for the feedback prettydarkhorse. I'll start adding some information on sources as soon as possible.

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   myownworldposted 14 years ago

   Great hub...I commented too..!

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      Health Wiseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for the comments. I'll try to breakup the paragraphs a little more. I didn't even think about adding a video, I'll get right on it. Thanks again for the input. Much appreciated.

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         myownworldposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         you're welcome... It's great to see such positive attitude towards criticism. keep up the good work!

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   Falsor Wingposted 14 years ago

   Your first paragraph is a "professionalism" faux-pas. an article shouldn't tell you what it is going to tell you, it should simply tell you. It sounds unusual, like your doing a review of your own article.
   
   That at least is what I think my old professors would have said, but this is the wild west of the internet so you might be able to go crazy and have no one care.

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      prettydarkhorseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Falsor, did you mean, that in the first paragraph you shouldnt tell what your article is all about, I think it is right that you divulge the topic of your article and the objective in the first paragraph

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         Falsor Wingposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         I was unclear, the introduction sets the stage for your article but it has little information content of its own. Its like going to the movies and seeing a preview for the movie that's about to start.
         
         let me start again, the introduction sounds awkward. It doesn't build as much interest as it could. People don't like to be reminded they're reading an article when they're reading an article it should just flow naturally.
         
         I hope I don't sound like internet D-bag.
         
         btw awesome topic phobias are interesting.

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            Health Wiseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            Hi Falsor, thanks a million for all the advise. I had a quick read over the introduction and can see what you mean, it does seem a bit awkward, I agree with what prettydarkhorse said on the previous thread that I should divulge some info on the topic but I need to work on the overall introduction a bit more.
            Thanks again, feedback is greatly appreciated

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   kimberlyslyricsposted 14 years ago

   I actually think you did a great job.
   
   A little long for me, but my attention span on anything is good for 5 min max
   
   I promise this will help you, cut your tags down to 10-15 key words that best describe your hub, that many, as I once learned can get your hub flagged as over promotional.
   
   I hate when I'm creating a hub and everything is lined up, ie; photo and copy and then publish and they fall out of alignment.  I often find it's a bad photo capsule.  Just edit and the 2 fallen photos put in new capsules.  Should fix it.
   
   I left you a comment because you really did a good job and are so open to advice or opinions it shows your desire and in my opinion are the ingredients of what a true hubber is.
   
   Cheers
   
   I hope something helped
   
   now I'm about to fan you
   
       Kimberly

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      Health Wiseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Hey Kimberly, Thanks for the great advice, I'll cut down on the tags right away. I'm looking at this hub in Firefox and it seems to be fine, cant see any photos dropping down. I'll try it out on other browsers just to be sure. Thanks again. Appreciate it...

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         kimberlyslyricsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Just checked again, I'm on mac and now its cool, how weird is that?  I don't even want to know why.  And Airports are poop.
         
         Just saying.
         
         no the hub is cool, me bad, no need to check - really looks good and love how it speaks to so many different people, I rated it up again
         
         Good Luck

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            Health Wiseposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            Thanks a million!!!

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