Okay I'm lookin' for some feedback hubbers.
My first hub is here: http://hubpages.com/hub/djgamedesign
Just moved over from Squidoo and I'm just getting used to the new content creation system you guys have here. I like it!
Anyways, thanks for reading.
Welcome. I read your hub and I liked it a lot. You wrote it with pace and I read it right to the end. Good stuff!
Hi I read your hub, from a reading point of view it looks great.
Lots of information for budding game designers.
Not really a gamer myself but great hub, well done.
Good first hub. Welcome to hubpages, I think you have a great writing style. I know less than nothing about game design, so I have no idea of it's commercial potential.
Nice style of writing.
There is no way I would sit still for 9 minutes of video though. Average time on hubs is way, way less than that.
Put your ads on the top right. Drive-by readers will never see two capsules down.
How about some links to those awesome on-line training opportunities?
Is relied the right word here? 'like video game design that is heavily relied on deadlines and reputation.'
Your writing is so good, you need to fix typos and spelling as they distract from the neat product: 'page that are extraodinary reads that'
'the principals of the job'
A little sloppy at the end, with fragments and conjunctions in the wrong place:
'Additionally, online degrees in video game design cost less than tuition at a state university. Which was good. Because I didn't have a lot of cash to put up for education nor could I take time away from my full time job to attend the university.'
You sir, are a very creative writer. You give that feeling to the reader that you are a neat person, it comes through in so many ways. Your writing is really good, but you have a couple of paragraphs that appear sloppy compared to the rest of your writing.
Steve, a long video is a good thing. Sure, visitors won't stick around to watch the whole thing but why is that a problem? The longer a visitor stays on your Hub, the better Google thinks it is - so if there's the slightest chance a reader might stick around for the whole clip, then that's great.
Links to the awesome on-line training opportunities - yes, if he's going to earn money from them. Otherwise links would be an invitation for readers to leave without clicking on an ad.
The word is reliant. And I agree about the spelling/typos.
looks good. great first hub!
I think the videos are great. if someone is looking for info on being a designer, they're going to watch the videos! they're looking for information.
welcome to HP, I'm sure you'll like it here.
I loved your hub. I read every word of it and watched all of the videos. It was compelling and interesting. I think anyone who wants a career in game design will love it.
Welcome to HP.
Marisa, thanks for the corrections. I do not wish to present myself as an expert. I am far from that.
I would never watch nine minutes of video, but if someone was intently interested, they probably would. I never even thought of that.
As I said before, the writing is an excellent style, I look forward to reading more. I still think that JLoM10 needs to be mindful of making the quality the same all the way through since he is so capable.
I guess I didn't see the links to outside sources the right way. You are right of course.
Now let's see if I can get this right. Hope the feedback is healthy.
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