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i need help

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    ammi1983posted 6 years ago

          i need help, how i improve my hub and a diffrent way to permute myself.

  2. Misha profile image75
    Mishaposted 6 years ago

    Once you transpose yourself, you can commute then. Otherwise, learning some English will probably help. smile

    1. CASE1WORKER profile image85
      CASE1WORKERposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      ouch but true

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        ammi1983posted 6 years ago in reply to this

        i know its true but what can i do?

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      ammi1983posted 6 years ago in reply to this

      ok i like your suggestions. anything else to me?

    3. Lily Rose profile image86
      Lily Roseposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      lol  lol

  3. SteveoMc profile image90
    SteveoMcposted 6 years ago

    Your hub is a mess.   I see no connection between the pictures and the text.

    The text does not make sense.   It seems to be rambling.  I read it three times and finally formed an opinion about what was meant.

    I applaud your efforts.

    Here is what I suggest, join a writer's group where you can get some editing help with your writing.   Have someone who had good English skills read your material and help you sort it out.

    Have several people read the material and make notes about how to improve it.

    Here are some editing suggestions for your 1st paragraph:

    An individual lives with himself and his identity from birth until death.

    The difference between self and identity is in perception.  The person sees self as the combination of his ideas and personality while identity is mostly external and based on the opinions of others about his lineage, deeds, and personal traits.

    Good luck.