my first ever hub..please critique

  1. amommy profile image60
    amommyposted 6 years ago

    Hello,
    Just started my very first hub.
    Would love to get some constructive criticism! smile

    Warning it's very emotional

    Toddler Orchiopexy

    Thank you,
               amommy

  2. Cagsil profile image60
    Cagsilposted 6 years ago

    Welcome to HubPages! smile

    Your link doesn't work. But, it's here- http://hubpages.com/hub/orchiopexy

    Why your link doesn't work is because the format you wanted to use, didn't work the way you used it.

    However, I have reviewed your hub:

    (a) Use more text capsules, instead of the one you used.
    (b) Use better paragraphing. Your readers will have short attention spans, when they come upon your hub. Smaller paragraphs will give it a look of well organized and easiness on the eyes. It won't look clutters or a lot to read.
    (c) Add more pictures if possible.
    (d) Add a poll or news feed or an RSS feed. The news and RSS feeds will keep refreshing content on your hub.

    I think you have a unique topic, specifically targeted. I'm not sure how it will do with regards to making your money, because this is the first I've heard of what you describe.

    However, good luck with it. smile I do hope you try and enjoy HubPages while you're here. smile

 
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