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   jenwat0405posted 12 years ago

   I have come here before to get feedback on my hubs, but have not had much response.  I would like to know if my hubs are good quality or what can I do to improve them.  I am not only new to HP but I am also new to writing to publish in general.  I enjoy writing, but that does not mean I am good at it. 
   
   If any of you can take a few minutes and read my hubs and offer feedback, I would be forever grateful.
   
   Here is one: http://hubpages.com/hub/The-Worst-Police-Officer
   and  http://hubpages.com/hub/Boys-will-be-Bo … e-tornados
   
   Thank you everyone!

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   Cagsilposted 12 years ago

   The hub below, I would adjust the format/layout a little bit. It would be your choice to change it.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/The-Worst-Police-Officer
   
   The hub below, I would also adjust the format/layout a little bit. Again, your choice if you want to leave it as is.
   
   And, I would add a few more keywords/tags.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Boys-will-be-Bo … e-tornados

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      jenwat0405posted 12 years agoin reply to this

      What would you suggest?  I will go play with it.  Will you come back and check it out in a few?

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   psycheskinnerposted 12 years ago

   Basically you have good text. I would suggest breaking it up a bit more with small paragraphs and sub-headings and maybe cutting back on the Amazon modules.

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   Rob Wintersposted 12 years ago

   At a glance the first thing i would do would be to break up the text to make it more reader friendly.Break the longer passages of text with some images or some videos or ads (obv without overdoing it) or try and create some sub headings within the text. Apparently this helps keeps people attentive as many people tend to skim through and may be turned off by long blocks of unbroken text.

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   jenwat0405posted 12 years ago

   Thank you everyone for your feedback.  I changed some things around and hope I made it better, visually.
   Let me know if it looks better and what you think about my newest article.
   http://hubpages.com/hub/A-Girls-Guide-to-Fishing

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   Rob Wintersposted 12 years ago

   I'd break up the second section of your 'Worst Police Officer' hub a bit more. I think your fishing hub looks much better. You're working fast there :-)

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   Greg Sageposted 12 years ago

   I'd have to agree with everyone.  Text blocks too big.  The guide part at the bottom of the fishing hub is more like it, but the top half is still too blocky.
   
   The blog/hub thing is a different aesthetic.  Forget your preconceived notions of what a newspaper article or term paper or magazine article should look like.  If it's over 3 inches tall, you might want to consider splitting it. 
   
   It's not even about organization or completing a thought.  It's just about bite-sized chunks that are easy to digest.  You would do well to assume that attention spans are short and their finger is resting on the "skip this hub and move on button" before they even start reading.
   
   Some bolding could help, text links, more formatting... anything that helps to give visual definition and break up monotony is a good thing, but overall, just breaking up the text looks like it's the only major issue.
   
   How many text breaks did I have in this answer, btw?
   
   Sometimes, it really helps you to:
   
   
   
   
   MAKE A POINT

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   jenwat0405posted 12 years ago

   Thank you all so much for your help.  I had a hub that I needed to revise and it has just now been republished. 
   I played with my other hubs, so yall go check them out and see if they look better.
   Aside from visual issues, how are my hubs contents?

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      jenwat0405posted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Sorry here is hte link for the other hub:
      http://hubpages.com/hub/Wounds-that-hea … ans-battle

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