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My second hub. I would love your feedback.

  1. Dr. Aaron LeBauer profile image79
    Dr. Aaron LeBauerposted 5 years ago

    I just finished my second hub.
    http://hubpages.com/hub/How-to-relieve- … steps?done
    I think I understand all the nuances, guidelines, etc.
    I have not worked or read through all of the learning center, as I learn best by doing and it would be great to have some feedback from all of you very experienced hubbers.
    thanks
    Aaron

    1. CASE1WORKER profile image83
      CASE1WORKERposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Aaron
      Firstly let me say how much I enjoyed reading your hub.
      However had I not been very interested in the subject I might have found the lay out a little daunting. It seemed to have a lot of writing in long paragraphs rather than being split up into bite sized paragraphs.  This may deter the casual visitor from reading the hub and thus losing the value of your good advice!

      1. Dr. Aaron LeBauer profile image79
        Dr. Aaron LeBauerposted 5 years ago in reply to this

        awesome! thanks for your feedback.
        what is your suggestion for a way to break it up a bit? and make it easier to digest?
        Is there another layout that would be better?
        thanks
        aaron

        1. CASE1WORKER profile image83
          CASE1WORKERposted 5 years ago in reply to this

          Perhaps use bold text for sub headings and use more than one capsule for the text , so the reader can "zoom in" on where they need to be?

  2. LuisEGonzalez profile image81
    LuisEGonzalezposted 5 years ago

    Actually I found it to be quite interesting and helpful. And I will use some of your techniques as I often suffer from back or neck pain. If I may make a suggestion; like caseworker1 said, break off your paragraphs a bit more and perhaps proofread more; you have a couple of grammar inconsistencies. cool

    1. Dr. Aaron LeBauer profile image79
      Dr. Aaron LeBauerposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Thanks for the feedback and tips.  I did find some easy mistakes.
      Would you take a look at the formatting changes I made and let me know what you think?
      thanks
      aaron

  3. LuisEGonzalez profile image81
    LuisEGonzalezposted 5 years ago

    On the paragraph "The video...show... (it should be "shows") and make the paragraph that starts with "Your company..." into a separate paragraph. cool

    1. Dr. Aaron LeBauer profile image79
      Dr. Aaron LeBauerposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      awesome,
      thank you very much

  4. LuisEGonzalez profile image81
    LuisEGonzalezposted 5 years ago

    You are welcome cool

 
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