Would love some feedback

  1. B. A. Williams profile image52
    B. A. Williamsposted 5 years ago

    I would love some feedback on my hub posts. Feel free to comment.

  2. Dame Scribe profile image60
    Dame Scribeposted 5 years ago

    Welcome to HubPages smile you are allowed to post the URLs of your articles in this forum, in case you didn't know wink Alright, I read this one - and note my observations.


    - I wasn't sure what you were trying to say
    - used Mayfair a lot (keyword stuffing?)
    - well written
    - interesting tidbits (monopoly, history, Dylan)

    Over all, I was sort of left wondering, huh? It is good to have a point, lead was good, tidbits were interesting, but I was left wondering where I was supposed to go with the info. You've got good writing skills, just need to focus it more. I'd suggest looking at other 'travel' hubs to get a 'feel' on developing your own 'style' of writing. You can add video and related links also to help 'prolong' your reader's stay wink

    1. B. A. Williams profile image52
      B. A. Williamsposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Thanks I can always write another article linking to the history of the Mayfair hotels. I probably should of wrote more directing the reader in travel in London, England, and will use your suggestions in the future.

      Thanks very much on the compliment of my writing skills. This is all new to me and I will be working on video for my new projects, good idea.

      Last night I added a new article on the capitol of antiques, Hudson, NY.

      Links to my articles:
      http://hubpages.com/hub/What-to-do-with … the-Garden