Hi fellow Hubbers

  1. chidismart profile image60
    chidismartposted 5 years ago

    Just new here and will appreciate advice,help and corrections on my hub to improve.
    Thanks for passing bye.

    1. kschang profile image90
      kschangposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Took a quick look through two hubs

      The screenwriting agent one...

      1) From your grammar and diction it appears you are not using American English. Nor is English your first language (no need to fret, it's not mine either)  There are many awkward grammar and diction problems in your sentences.

      EX: " they should be happy with them self. "

      Who is "them self"? Don't you mean "themselves"?

      It is almost as if you wrote it in some other language, then translated it mentally into English. It simply reads... weird. it doesn't flow right.

      2) Formatting is horrible. Sections that should be bolded wasn't.

      3) Too short.

      4) Most agents don't just accept any client off the street. If the author has some credentials or celebrity status finding an agent becomes much easier.

      As for your "Incredible Secrets" one...

      1) I am almost sure that you are probably from India. There's a uniqueness to Indian English. it sounds British, but is layered with unique Indian patterns. They love the word "skyrocket" as a verb, not used anywhere else.

      2) The tips are not organized in any particular order.

      3) There's a huge block of code at the end that is not working at all.

      4) still too short.