I have created some relationship information would love feedback pleas

  1. Inspired to write profile image75
    Inspired to writeposted 5 years ago

    Hi, I have created an article concerning (what I think) is an important, but when going out for time, seems forgotten, could you agree, or disagree? I would love your input. Thank you. Dale

    http://inspired-to-write.hubpages.com/h … -Lose-Them

    1. J Burgraff profile image79
      J Burgraffposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      I have to be honest, you took an awful long time to get to the point.  That much foreplay and I think I would probably go to sleep.  So...think about your article like foreplay.  Keep it fun, interesting, intense, but do get to the point.  And I'm a woman saying this.  Eew...and rework that title.  Good point, just needs a little brushing up.

      1. Inspired to write profile image75
        Inspired to writeposted 5 years ago in reply to this

        Yes it does seem to ramble on a bit lol, thanks for the tips & the feedback J Burgraff

 
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