First Hub, comments and critiques please

  1. SheriKeat profile image60
    SheriKeatposted 5 years ago

    My very first attempt at writing anything on line.

    1. Uninvited Writer profile image81
      Uninvited Writerposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Overall, it's not bad. You are missing some apostrophes in the first sentence and other places. But other than that you did a good job. It would look nicer if you added a photograph or some illustration.