My First Short Story - Feedback Please

  1. kannanwrites profile image82
    kannanwritesposted 5 years ago

    This is the first time I have tried to write a short story. I always wanted to write one.

    Any feedback, tips, suggestions, criticism would be of great help.

    http://kannanwrites.hubpages.com/hub/Baba-A-Short-Story

    1. bell du jour profile image61
      bell du jourposted 5 years ago in reply to this

      Hi Kannanwrites, I enjoyed your lovely story.  I really like the name you chose for the dog 'Baba', its an Irish name for baby. 

      Bell

      1. kannanwrites profile image82
        kannanwritesposted 5 years ago in reply to this

        Thanks a ton for your feedback. Good to know that baba in Irish is for baby.
        Whereas in India we say baba as an affectionate term which can be used for father, a well-respected person and even sometimes for babies.

 
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