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Feedback on my first hub please

  1. marylined profile image58
    marylinedposted 4 years ago

    Hello everyone, i've posted my first "hub" and am excited.  However, i also know there is much room for improvement and i ask that you would be so kind as to give me feedback, comments, or questions.

    Tanks so much.

    http://marylined.hubpages.com/hub/Insid … trepreneur

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      TrinityCatposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      Hi there! First of all, welcome to Hubpages! I'm also relatively new here, so I'm just starting to post hubs as well. big_smile

      I read yours a while ago. One detail I think it can improve is the quality of the images you used. Other than that, you did good for a first hub! I gave it an "interesting" rating. wink big_smile

      Keep 'em coming! smile

  2. Pearldiver profile image86
    Pearldiverposted 4 years ago

    Overall you have quite a nicely balanced hub.. though you need to change some of your work and do so without losing the script.

    I refer to that part which promotes Duplication and your advice!
    - Ditch it Completely, as in this regard, you can be seen as telling article thieves that it is Okay to Duplicate Content.. Which of course it isn't.

    You have stretched a Chart which clearly is not yours to the point that it detracts from your hub completely. Crisp images as with the first is perfect.

    Break up your hub text capsules and perhaps add more images, that if original, will also serve as a vehicle to bring traffic. If you are wondering what I mean.. have a look at a hub of mine and see how I have laid them out.

    You have written on a subject that must be promoted as if you are fully conversant with it, as opposed to quoting and using the terminology of Z Z - who has been around for decades! Tell the story in a Newer Format. You are writing to the World, so DON'T refer to things like 'Crab' nature etc. that most people Do Not Understand and are just confused by your mention, as you failed to explain your jargon! I have been an entrepreneur for many years.. but I haven't got any clue or interest in what you are trying to say about Crabs! - If you know what I mean! You know you could polish it up abit more, so I'm sure you will.
    As I said there is a good potential base article here, so make the effort and you should do well. Just don't use "see you at the top!" text references! He borrowed that title from another Insurance performer years ago!
    Well done for a first up though... Good Luck

    1. thejeffriestube profile image84
      thejeffriestubeposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      Wow, Pearl. good catches, I missed the duplicate thing the first go around. When I found it though, I felt a cold shiver.

      The terminology thing really needs to be worked on. It feels like you're quoting from MLM recruiting documents. You indeed have to make this your own words. Interpret what they say and say it your own way.