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What you Walk On

  1. cyrilalmond profile image61
    cyrilalmondposted 4 years ago

    Well i put my first one up. Did not get it right with the link. I got confused on that one. Please tell it how it is. I need to learn. Thank you Cyril Almond 

    <link: http://cyrilalmond.hubpages.com/t/2dc70f >

    1. IzzyM profile image84
      IzzyMposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      For a start, you should have linked your hub in the body of the forum post form, not in the heading.
      That said, you only have one hub so it is not hard to find.

      Check your grammar. You have full stops where they shouldn't be and commas where they should (in one or two places).

      I believe you should change the title.

      Your hub is about looking after your feet, and anyone searching for that information is (probably) not going to type in "what you walk on" unless they don't know the word for feet.

      Your hub is short on information, IMO.

      You have given a brief overview of why you should look after your feet. You end with 'more later', but a hub is meant to be a complete article (that you might find in a magazine), so if I was you I would go back and add how to look after your feet to explain your intro (and title it accordingly).

      You cannot change the url, but really that is not important. Title is everything, so long as it accurately describes your content.

      You might want to add a photo or two to break the text up when you have added another paragraph or two. Readers find it easier on the eye.

      Your url is exactly what is in your browser bar at the top when you open the hub. http://cyrilalmond.hubpages.com/hub/What-You-Walk-On

      Welcome to Hubpages smile

    2. John Holden profile image60
      John Holdenposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      Yikes,all good advice and you have the making of a good series of hubs there, but do tighten up on your grammar, punctuation and line breaks.

      A little more foot information and a little less about cars would have been good.

      But basically and not withstanding all the comments you have a good fluid writing style, worked upon, it could take you places. It was easy to read, only slightly marred by your distinctive punctuation and line breaks, or rather spacing between lines.

      1. cyrilalmond profile image61
        cyrilalmondposted 4 years ago in reply to this

        Thank you for your comments much appreciated and taken on board.

        Cyril Almond.

  2. cyrilalmond profile image61
    cyrilalmondposted 4 years ago

    Thankyou for your reply and good advice. I will take note and rework this hub.
    I am new to this and i appreciate that you took time to review it.

    The only dificulty that i find is you will have gathered i know a lot about feet. To put down what i know or give advice would not go in one hub. That is where i was coming from. I shall have to watch that in future.

    Thanks for telling it how it is.

    God Bless Cyril Almond.

    1. IzzyM profile image84
      IzzyMposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      What you could do then is leave that hub as it is just now - except take away the bit at the end about 'more soon'.

      Write a few more hubs round the topic - I dunno foot care, how to cut toenails or how to cure an achilles tendon or why you should always wear correctly fitting shoes or something (sorry, your speciality, not mine LOL).

      Make each hub specific about a specific problem someone might be looking for, and provide all the answers you think that person might ask.

      (Remembering to title it as closely to the subject matter as you can - your title gets the search engine traffic)

      Then when you have written a few, go back to this, your first hub, and extend it by linking all those new hubs in, with a few short words about each.

      So this is the overview, basically saying, I am the foot expert, and we need to take care of our feet, and here's why...then you provide links to your other hubs each with a short summary to draw the reader in.

      Sorted smile