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Lets Make A Movie!

  1. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    A lot of people here know I wanna make a movie, but before I do that, how about we make one right here in hubpages. Everybody is gets to do the screenwriting. It should be fun. I'll start...
    Scene One
    (An elevator door opens, the song Liar Liar Pants On Fire plays in the background.) A young beautiful woman comes out of the elevator, and is met by bum-looking sorta dude. She gasps as if in recognition of who he is. The man pulls out a revolver and blows her head off. Shoves the gun back into his coat, gets into the elevator, and slides down to the down floor, from where he makes his escape.

    The screen blacks out as the movie title is displayed...MR. SMITH'S WESSON. A film by fierycj. Screenplay by hubbers.

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      sandra rinckposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      -flash back-
      scene starts from the perspective of a person opening his eyes.
      Earlier that year during the holiday season in some city in New Jersey, Mr. Smith receives a present from a secret admirer.

      *door bell* Mr. Smith answers the door. A beautiful women with long dark hair and blue eyes and voluptuous lips in a FedEx uniform delivers the package.

      Alley- Merry Christmas sir, are you Mr. Smith?
      Mr. Smith- why yes and whom do I owe this pleasure?
      (Alley blushes)
      Alley- (she giggles in a flirtatious way) Well I think good ole saint Nick wouldn't mind getting a thank you every now and again.
      Mr. Smith- (taking the pen to sign for the package) well then...what is your name?
      Alley- Alley
      Mr. Smith- well then Alley, tell old St. Nick, thank you for sending an angel to deliver this package.
      Alley- (smiling and walks away)I will be sure to deliver the message.  Marry Christmas!

      Mr. Smith gives the package a shake and sets it down next on the table next to the door so he can go to the bathroom.

      Boom!  The package detonates.

      1. marinealways24 profile image61
        marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        The bomb filled package of jakalope and woodchuck pieces fly throughout the room!

        1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
          Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

          You can see the loss of sanity flicker in his eyes as he peels a bloody jackalope ear off his cheek.

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            sandra rinckposted 8 years ago in reply to this

            The live studio audience get's the prompt to cheer!

            1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
              Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

              Interesting effect.  Even canned applause would do.

  2. SweetiePie profile image86
    SweetiePieposted 8 years ago

    I wish the film started my light heartedly smile.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    o.k. so what do we do now.... this sounnds like fun to me

  4. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Start with Scene Two. What do you think should happen next. Lets build the screenplay. There you have Scene One. What's the next scene?

  5. Colebabie profile image59
    Colebabieposted 8 years ago

    Why do you love violent movies the most? Just wondering... smile

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Who said so...i like happy movies, too. Just prefer violent ones. Violent movies teach just how frail human life is. Hey, someone do the Scene Two please! This is a collabo! You cant have me do everything, guys!

  6. Colebabie profile image59
    Colebabieposted 8 years ago

    Well you pretty much say so in your posts. And you just said you prefer them. I'm not good at this, so I'll have to leave Scene II to someone else smile

  7. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Where's Sufi, and those movie buffs in hubpages? Where the hell are you guys when I need ya, huh?

  8. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    But you gotta admit. That's a winning title for a movie right there -  MR. SMITH'S WESSON, if I must say so myself. Catchy indeed.

  9. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Scene Two is simple really guys. You dont have to have a degree in Screenplay Writing to do it. Okay, here goes SCENE TWO.
    (Crime scene, cops, coroners and forensic investigators beset the second floor where the murder of the young woman took place) See its simple.

    1. marinealways24 profile image61
      marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      The killer jumps out of the closet with a chainsaw and destroys the police. The killer then cooks and eats parts of the cops. The killer drinks a 40oz. and drives to the strip club.

      1. fierycj profile image85
        fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        That is just brilliant. Davina's was good too, but I like yours better, Marine. Its so off the wall. And bizzare as hell.

      2. marinealways24 profile image61
        marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        1 more if I may.

        The killer smokes a blunt while driving down the road while striking and killing 3 pedestrians in his quest of nudity. Upon arriving, Buffy is awaiting, "his favorite stripper". They snort 3 lines of coke and then enter the club.

        1. fierycj profile image85
          fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

          You're a natural, Marine. If you ever do a bizarre screenplay like that I wanna be your director, no kidding.

          1. marinealways24 profile image61
            marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

            Lol I don't see hollywood knocking and I don't know their address. None the less, thanks.

            1. fierycj profile image85
              fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

              Don't put yourself down. You never know how things turn out. A screenplay like that will have Tarantino or Rodriguez drooling, easily.

  10. Sufidreamer profile image82
    Sufidreamerposted 8 years ago

    Good title, man, although I am no screenwriter - I only do the crew stuff! smile

  11. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    Was that just an example?  Because I would say, Scene 2: (elevator doors open on the man who killed the woman, an he is slumped on the floor in a pool of his own blood.  Camera's back up into the lobby of a busy, posh, hotel.  The gun is nowhere to be found.  A woman screams.  Tight closeup on the man's face. He's dead.  His eyes are open.)

  12. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    As he's driving to the club, he goes over a bridge and chucks the bloody chainsaw in the river.  This sounds like Rob Zombie, now.

    1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
      Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Then he belches.

  13. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Who's got Scene Three?

  14. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    Could the name of the club be "Muff SCUBA".  I have always wanted to see that in lights... haha.

  15. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    So the guy kills the girl, kills the cops, drives to the club, kills pedestrians, smokes some blunts, and sees some strippers. Who's got Scene Four?

    1. marinealways24 profile image61
      marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      lol

  16. marinealways24 profile image61
    marinealways24posted 8 years ago

    I want to chime in later after more people post. Pretty entertaining. Great Idea.

  17. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Yes it is. So how does Mr. Smith get on, still packing his revolver, still mad as ever...still in a raging killing spree.

  18. bangawking000 profile image59
    bangawking000posted 8 years ago

    wahahahaha!! , , , , compile all scenes and post it on hubs,

    i really like it!! :-)

  19. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    He may as well kill a couple of strippers while he's at it.  He is on a roll.  How about scene 4 have a dead lap dancer on a table as Buffy and Mr. Smith do tequila shots out of her navel?

    1. marinealways24 profile image61
      marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Smith gets plastered on tequila shots and pisses on the dead stripper. He feels the sudden urge to go to church and pray. When arriving at church, instead of praying, Smith kills the preacher at the door and sets the church on fire.

      1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
        Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        Give it some wicked pyrotechnics.  I wanna hear BOOM!!!!

  20. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    A studio ought to hire both you guys. Seriously. Okay, so he pisses and or kills the stripper. Scene Five, goes to church makes a confession, kills the priest, burns the church down. Phew! What happens in Scene Six?

    1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
      Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Can we have a sex scene, please?  To even it out.

      1. fierycj profile image85
        fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        we might as well. But dont do it explicit. I dont want the Hubpages Team clamping down on us.

        1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
          Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

          Well then, they can do "it" on the hood of his Charger as a silouette in front of the burning church.

      2. marinealways24 profile image61
        marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        Smith heads back to the hotel room to rest. While driving, he masturbates in the car while thinking of the days killings. He runs over 2 more pedestrians in his drunken madness and arrives at the hotel with his pants still unzipped.

  21. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Ok, now I got a question. So far so good. You guys are the screenwriters. So how does this all connect? Why is he dressed like a bum? Why is he packing a Smith and Wesson? And why is he killing everybody? Can we make the next scenes connect. I think this will make your script worthy for the Best Original Screenplay nomination. Lol.

    1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
      Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Mr. Smith has snapped.  His wife and child have been killed and in the next scene we will see flashes of his lost life.  He has lost everything, including his mind.  He has no idea who snuck into his house and brutally slaughtered his family, so he must kill everyone.  It could be anyone.

      1. fierycj profile image85
        fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        my thoughts exactly. Make it simple. The lady he killed in the elevator is his wife. Thats why she recognized him. She left him when he lost his job, went boozing, became a bum. So he got a Smith and Wesson revolver for her. Now its his best companion. Besides the whores, of course. Gawd, i'm loving this.

        1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
          Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

          This is kind of genius.  Teamwork rocks.

          1. fierycj profile image85
            fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

            I'm telling ya. And hey, Marine, good going. I always like a lil touch of the paranormal. As the director, I used fluorescent green frenzied images to depict the visions in his head. This is brilliant!

      2. marinealways24 profile image61
        marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        Smith has a sixth sense. He carries the Smith and Wesson because it was the murder weapon left behind from his familys killers. He has visions everytime he touches the gun. The visions are sometimes blurred, so he must kill anyone and everyone resembling the killers images upon touching the gun.

  22. marinealways24 profile image61
    marinealways24posted 8 years ago

    Simple is often predictable.

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      not too simple. Just so you understand why he's doing what he's doing. Everything else ought to convoluted as hell. I rely on you guys. The Oscar is at stake here, huh!

      1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
        Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        I don't want to go in the same direction as "Memento"... I don't mean backward, but you know what I mean... Killed his wife. Went nuts...  This requires finesse.

  23. marinealways24 profile image61
    marinealways24posted 8 years ago

    lol

  24. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Awesome input, Sandra. So lets go back to the flashing images everytime Mr. Smith touches the gun. This will help carve out the full plot of the story. Its all about Smith and his gun.

    1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
      Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      He goes over to his suitcase in the closet and opens it.  Inside is a small wooden case with the mother of all Smith and Wessons.  He takes it out and behind it is a envelope with a childlike scrawl.  It says only one word, "Daddy".

  25. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Brilliant stuff. So who's got more.

    1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
      Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      He quickly tucks the gun, and the letter, into his jeans and walks out of the hotel room with out a second glance back.  He goes to his car, but decides to go to the front desk.  As he enters the lobby.  The clerk is leaning back reading a comic book:
      Clerk:      Damn, dude, what happened to you?
      Mr. Smith:  You okayed a delivery to be sent to my room this   
                  morning?
      Clerk:      Yep! She was pretty hot, huh?
      Mr. Smith: (smiles and then quickly pulls out the gun and puts
                  a bullet right between the clerks eyes.)
                  I distinctly asked not to be disturbed.
                 (Mr. Smith replaces the gun, takes out his
                  keys and twirls them on his fingers, whistles a
                  happy tune and returns to his car.  His first kill
                  was satisfying.)

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        sandra rinckposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        *commercial intervention*

        (mother from the Brady Bunch)

        -cooking with Wesson is family tradition. (shows Mr. Brady at the dinner table with gigantic gut and a fork in one hand and a knife in the other.  On the table is a head of a human with a bullet hole in the head.  The kids are around the table with bibs and smiles.

        Marcia- Golly Ma, this looks great!  Did you cook him with Wesson?
        Peter- Shut up Marcia, you're so dumb.  (he throws a roll at her nose)
        Marcia- (crying) my nose!
        Mr. Brady- Kids, stop it.  Can't we just enjoy one f*cking meal in a nice and reasonable fashion?

        Camera pans back to Mrs. Brady. 

        Mrs. Brady- (gives a smile and a shoulder shrug) In our house we only use Wesson.  (She holds up her Wesson and smiles and her teeth sparkle)

        1. marinealways24 profile image61
          marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

          Fkn Excellent lol

  26. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Great dialogue. I love it. I love it.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    Can I star in the movie, even if I do not write anything at all because I have always wanted to be a film star,and would i get to kiss the handsome man please xxx

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Brenda, you never told me that you wanted to be an actress. what else you havent told me? Huh? You wanna go mountain climbing, huh?

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    I dont want a big part, just really to kiss the handsome guy as I said, I like kissing handsome men, but not really climbing mountains.....

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Would you mind kissing me, then...i'm not that bad looking, you know.

  29. Sufidreamer profile image82
    Sufidreamerposted 8 years ago

    Looks like we are going to be fighting for the role, fiery lol

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      get in line, Sufi. First come, first serve...LOL. Where's Brenda? My lips are ready!!!

      1. Sufidreamer profile image82
        Sufidreamerposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        A cheeky wedgie'

        http://www.northeastfoto.com/forums/images/smilies/wedgie.gif

        .....then nip in front to steal the leading lady from under your nose. big_smile

        1. fierycj profile image85
          fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

          Like I hadn't already thought of that. LOL. You must be kidding to think I'll leave space for a wedgie. Ha!

  30. profile image0
    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    Well now, when the movie is ready can i choose, and will I get paid.  Fiery .... Sufi is pretty damn good looking though if you were me, maybe you would choose him......

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Now thats an outright open rejection on the world wide web. I guess my lips are too good for ya, Bren. Go ahead then, have the Greek boy. LOL. I'll go find a leading lady to smooch with. I'm the Director. I'm HOT!!!

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    If you are the director, how could you be the leading man also

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      i'm the director. I can do whateva the hell I want. Besides, plenty a director play lead in their own movies.

      1. marinealways24 profile image61
        marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        f'n excellent! lol

  32. Sufidreamer profile image82
    Sufidreamerposted 8 years ago

    Looks like we have the making of another screenplay, here - the eternal love triangle.

    We just have to work out how to get a zombie cyborg killer hedgehog into the script.

  33. Eaglekiwi profile image74
    Eaglekiwiposted 8 years ago

    lol @ I can do whatever the hell I like...

    ok well listen here if theres gonna be a cyborg hedgehog running around , I definately want my own trailer! smile

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      @ I definitely want my own trailer! You signing up or what?

      1. Eaglekiwi profile image74
        Eaglekiwiposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        what! you forgot already ( directors!)...of course smile

  34. marinealways24 profile image61
    marinealways24posted 8 years ago

    Mr. Director, what is the last line of the movie?

    1. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Alas, it seemed darkly ironic that Mr. Smith's Wesson would Smite him.

      1. marinealways24 profile image61
        marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        Dude, I'm from the trailor park, you think I know what in the hell smite means? lol

  35. Eaglekiwi profile image74
    Eaglekiwiposted 8 years ago

    I will be a detective
    I dont wanna kiss hedgehogs, or do the slice n dice stuff
    my people will be in touch with your people smile

    1. Sufidreamer profile image82
      Sufidreamerposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Bloody Diva - Hedgehogs not good enough for you, eh......hmm

      1. Eaglekiwi profile image74
        Eaglekiwiposted 8 years ago in reply to this

        lol just found they can be pricks :lol
        but truly had a pet once ( cept he didnt know it) called Harry, and he almost became my flatmate..so no no no to the kissy part

        Thought Bren was up for the kissy part?

    2. fierycj profile image85
      fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Hey, I always thought you have fanned me, Eagle. Hey! Have you guys read my latest hub on Movie Directors. I just published it like two hours ago. Check it out pls, guys.

  36. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    What did I miss? I only left for a little while.  Could someone sum up where we left off?  I want to contribute some more.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    yeah unless there is a lot of kissing, I would not be up for much really

  38. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    Who is kissing whom?

  39. marinealways24 profile image61
    marinealways24posted 8 years ago

    I think mr. smith is due to kill someone "again", he has had his rest. Director?

  40. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    From what I can tell, Mr. Smith is leaving the hotel in the flashback.  We can pick up from there?

    1. marinealways24 profile image61
      marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      I will attempt.

      Smith has visions of the killer as he touches the gun. He smokes another blunt and snorts another line of coke. During his visions, he see's a masked midget. Smith puts on his kill face and immediately heads for blood.

      1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
        Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        Mr. Smith recognizes the little man, and is no mood to deal with his bullsh*&t.  He has fought the killer dwarf on many occasions.  Mr. Smith reaches in the back seat and sees his chainsaw.  It's a pull start and he is cramped for space. So, he grabs his guitar.  With one swift motions he brings it down on the little man's head.  It shatters and he uses the strings to strangle the dwarf.  He pulls so tightly, he severs the midgets head and sends it tumbling into the floorboard.

        1. marinealways24 profile image61
          marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

          You evil little person killer! lol

  41. marinealways24 profile image61
    marinealways24posted 8 years ago

    Mr. Director is banging actresses!

  42. Eaglekiwi profile image74
    Eaglekiwiposted 8 years ago

    http://tbn3.google.com/images?q=tbn:pQ6L98EXnFxysM:http://bp1.blogger.com/_sqDqLALRJJk/R3VpMjDo0uI/AAAAAAAAA9M/u_INFlzaHuU/s400/RoboMonkey.jpg

    could do with some work ,no doubt

  43. Sufidreamer profile image82
    Sufidreamerposted 8 years ago

    lol

  44. Eaglekiwi profile image74
    Eaglekiwiposted 8 years ago

    Check out his lips brenda...lol aww aint he cute

  45. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    When I wanted "banging" in the movie, he was worried about propriety.  Men are strange.

  46. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Hey, I'm not banging anybody. I'm serious on set. I don't even laugh. Here, I am ordering everybody from key grip to First AD. Hey, we've got the end plot, so how the hell do we arrive there?

  47. Davinagirl3 profile image61
    Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago

    Marine is good at getting some wild sh*& jumpin' off.  I say, Marine takes the next scene.

  48. profile image0
    \Brenda Scullyposted 8 years ago

    I can kiss more than one if it helps.....

  49. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    Hey, how does Smith kill all these people without drawing attention to himself. Without having the damn feds on his ass? How? C'mon people, I dont want a flaw in my damn script. What I'm I paying you for, for heaven's sake? Get to work!

    1. marinealways24 profile image61
      marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      Smith paid off the cops! lol

      1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
        Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        He is a rogue agent!

        1. fierycj profile image85
          fierycjposted 8 years ago in reply to this

          he's a rogue agent or he's paying off the damn cops, which? Hey, he's a damn bum remember! How does he get the dough? Hey, I'm riding on your asses cos I want an Oscar worthy script. C'mon, gimme something better, you know you can (I'm enjoying this) C'mon, get to work, Writers! You know the Studio Execs are riding on my ass on this! How the hell are we gonna have a Summer blockbuster ready next year at this pace! Move it!

          1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
            Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

            Can a person not look like a bum, but be an agent.  Marine and I are going to have to come to an agreement somehow.  Maybe, he is a government assassin and when he snapped he just let himself go.  He has been living on the streets... the back alleys, sleeping in dumpsters to avoid detection.  Sometimes, he cleans up and is as dashing as 007.  He is a master of disguise.  That is how he avoids detection.  Damn, you're a slave driver... I like it. wink

        2. marinealways24 profile image61
          marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

          Smith sole the money from the strip club after he killed them.

          1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
            Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

            BUT!!!! Would that clear up the fact that he killed a bunch of cops with a chainsaw?  It must he one hell of a lot of money.

            1. marinealways24 profile image61
              marinealways24posted 8 years ago in reply to this

              Those were the cops that didn't accept the bribe! lol Chainsaws tend to make amazing progress! He ate the cops simply because he was hungry and he's fuqd in the head.

  50. fierycj profile image85
    fierycjposted 8 years ago

    I like the master of disguise bit. Put a spin on it. FAST!

    1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
      Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

      His wife ended up being a double agent, and she hid his only child and faked her own and the child's death to escape him before he found out she was envolved in counter espionage.  He found her, tracked her to the hotel and killed her.  He is, now searching for his son.

      1. Davinagirl3 profile image61
        Davinagirl3posted 8 years ago in reply to this

        Help me, Marine?!?!?

 
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