First story posted on hub! Thank you hubpages

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   cookingdivaposted 13 years ago

   I have written poems and stories for long but always for my eyes and rare family and friends to show for.
   
   Thanks to hubpages community support, I have posted my first story for public eye first time! Can you please check it out
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/A-Short-Story-B … n-Her-Eyes
   
   Thank you and be kind.
   
   Thank you everyone who has helped me directly or indirectly! This is one of the best online community I have seen. Thank you.

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   saleheensblogposted 13 years ago

   nice lil one. I like it. Educative story.
   
   You may want to correct some minor errors:
   
   sun has just came out[come]
   near by [nearby]
   every minutes [minute]
   one of the most beautiful smile [smiles]
   her self [herself]
   about it, then surely [and then]
   more sad [sadder]
   cappuncciono [cappuccino]
   walked by those girls table [girls']
   Nira thought how kind of these girls to take pity on her and make feel better by smiling at her. [Nira thought how kind these girls were to take pity on her and make her feel better by smiling at her]

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      cookingdivaposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Saleheen,
      
      Thank you for comment and valuable suggestions! I made those now.

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   saleheensblogposted 13 years ago

   Some keywords you could use:
   
   story girl
   beauty story
   inner and outer beauty
   outer beauty
   you being beautiful
   beauty only skin deep
   beauty of mind
   beauty of eyes
   
   There is a song on story of a girl. The following keywords can be used if you place the youtube video in your story.
   
   [story about beauty
   story about a girl
   story of a girl
   story of a beautiful girl
   this is the story of a girl
   this is a story of a girl
   absolutely the story of a girl]
   
   You are highly recommended to write a summary about the hub as the automated summary doesn't reflect your content.
   
   I would change the title to "A short story about a beautiful girl: Beauty in her eyes"
   
   Make the first text capsule a little bigger [120 words will be good enough] so that you can get the larger block of ads on top of the hub to increase the CTR. Use at least 3 text capsule to split your text.

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      cookingdivaposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Saleheen,
      
      Thanks, I am still learning about keywords, where do I put them in tags or articles itself?
      
      Where to write a summery of the hub? And where to see how many words I have per text module? I am not able to see it on edit mode. Thank you so much.

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         saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Put them in tags and if possible in text also. Learn more about Keyword research basics.There are plenty of good hubs on both keyword and on page optimization by misha, peter hogan, sunforged, syazllyn, wrylit, susan s.........
         
         Here is the summary text.
         
         
         Always write in MS word then copy/paste in text capsules. You will get a better overview of your grammar and word count then and won't stand a chance of loosing any unsaved data.

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   Rosie2010posted 13 years ago

   I read your story, it's beautiful.  Aside from some spelling mistakes (next time don't forget to use Spellcheck) you did a nice job on your first story. So lovely!
   
   Have a nice day,
   Rosie

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      cookingdivaposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Rosie,
      
      I always spell check, if there are any mis-spelled words that I might have missed do tell, as I can always use extra pair of eyes! Thanks.

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