I'd like feedback on my Hub: The Best Lucid Dreaming Guide and Techniques

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   Jacob Knowlesposted 8 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub The Best Lucid Dreaming Guide and Techniques (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      AndrewHil93posted 8 years agoin reply to this

      It's extremely busy... Too many focal points, not enough content.

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      Engeltaposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      It does not have a natural flow. I mean, look at it: it starts with capsules of text, then it jumps to videos and photos, then a short piece of text, then again video and photos.. It seems like you are just trying to fill in your hub everything you can to make it Stellar Hub.. But, you have to think on how you will add photos and videos the right way so they don't mess up with the reader's mind while they try to get some information out of it. The hub should be longer too.
      I would suggest to start it with a photo, then a photo after the text.. The videos? Leave them for in the end.

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   Kylyssaposted 8 years ago

   I'd take the word 'best' right out of the title. That may be one of the factors that caused it to fail QAP. Use of such words in titles has fallen very much out of favor.
   
   If it hasn't passed QAP it may be because you haven't written much about the products you have for sale. You could go several ways with that piece of information.
   
   I think your best option would be to remove all but one product and explain what that product is and does with text. You could try giving a clear explanation of what each product is and does and keep all of he products. Or you could remove the products for sale and just mention them.
   
   I also think you've let the videos do too much of the talking for you. Many people like to learn by reading and those people are often the sort who will click on an article rather than a video. People who've chosen what appears to be a written tutorial may be put off when they don't actually get a written tutorial. By the title and the introduction, I fully expected written explanations of how to attempt lucid dreaming. You explained the one technique well enough but the others relied very heavily on the videos.
   
   Explaining the techniqes in writing will actually encourage people to watch the videos, too.
   
   I think you've got a good premise for the piece and your writing style is quite good, but it doesn't deliver what the title promises. It's maybe six sentences away from being fantastic, in my opinion.
   
   [edited to add] Whoops. Looks like you already took the 'best' out of the title and got it featured.

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   relacheposted 8 years ago

   Lucid dreaming does not require ingesting herbal products.  Those capsules are nnecessary products that makes your Hub seem spammy.

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