I'd like feedback on my hub please: Black African Soap

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   Erzulie LMposted 8 years ago

   Hello
   
   Could you please have a look at my hub and tell me what you think http://hubpages.com/style/Black-African-Soap
   
   I'd be really appreciative of any feedback you can provide
   
   Thanks in advance

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      AEvansposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      There are a few typos, along with a handful of run on sentences.  Try not to overstuff your keywords when writing any type of article. Easily corrected with the revision.
      
      Keyword example:( Black soap).... When used to many times it will not rank well in Google. Plus, repetitiveness becomes mundane. We already know that it is " black soap", so try not to use it as filler words.
      
      It appears you are writing about two separate topics. ( Black soap) and  (exfoliation) using black soap. I would recommend removing the instructional part of exfoliation and creating  a hub separately about exfoliation using the product.
      
      Recipe, benefits, etc..... Overall, it is an interesting hub. I found it to be useful and on point.

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         Erzulie LMposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         AEvans,
         
         Thanks so much for your feedback. I've removed a lot of the keywords (I see what you mean about it sounding repetitive!)  I'll correct the typos and run on sentences.

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      promisemposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      I would switch the second photo with the first photo and display it across the full width of the article. The second photo works well with the second paragraph, but it has more visual appeal than the first one. Switching them and making that second photo bigger will increase visual appeal without hurting the content.
      
      You might consider expanding the title to something like, "How to Make Black African Soap," so that will rank better in search engines for anyone using that keyword phrase.
      
      Try using short sentences and one- or two-sentence paragraphs to increase reading ease, which is a search engine factor.
      
      Can you create another related subtopic? Longer information-dense articles  rank better in search engines.

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         Erzulie LMposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Promisem
         
         Thanks, this helps a bunch! I'll switch the photos as you suggested and shorten the sentences paragraphs. Thanks also for your advice on search engine optimisation. Fantastic!

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            promisemposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            Glad to help, Erzulie.

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      erorantesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      I like your article. It is informative. You miss a punctuation at the end of the first sentence. The instructions have a dash at the beginning of the sentences. It is easy to read with numbers. Good luck.

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   psycheskinnerposted 8 years ago

   Overall I think it is a good hub.  I would suggest maybe adding a small comment on how the potash makes the soap mildly to strongly alkaline --many people think all "natural" soaps have neutral pH but this is certainly not true of black soap.

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      Erzulie LMposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      psycheskinner
      
      Adding information about the soaps ph is a great idea and a good way of expanding the hub! Thanks so much for your input.

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   Sparrowletposted 8 years ago

   Nice job! I noticed a few typos too:
   
   It has a mild nutty smell which is faily neutral, hoever this can be off putting for some.
   
   But I think the organization is good and the information makes an interesting read. Instead of the heading "Deep Exfoliation Treatment" I would use "How to Make a Deep Exfoliation Treatment", since you then give the recipe. That way, people looking for exfoliation treatments to make at home will likely use those keywords (How to) and find your hub more easily.
   
   Katharine

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      Erzulie LMposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Katharine
      
      Ooops! Thanks for pointing out the typos
      I'll also change the heading, great feedback, thanks again.

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