Thoughts, written down, edited,eventually might evolve into a poem...
perfume...life and chasing rainbows.
First draft.
I know now that life is like perfume,
If you do not enjoy it
Each day it dilutes,loses its vibrancy,fades.
I will not store it away, pressed petals in a jar.
Splashed across my wrist and dancing in the rain
Until the prism bows, an arch across the sky.
Sweetly scented, somewhere over the rainbow.
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second edit(draft):
Now I know, life like perfume
Not enjoyed, loses its essence
dilutes and fades, is lost.
Pressed petals in a jar,
stored no longer,released.
dancing in the rain
a prism bows, arcs the sky.
One day some where some time
for now...
Essentially the essence of life
is to enjoy the moment.
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okay got to leave it there.. will edit some more later.
75- free4india
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good job !
3rd - extraction/edit.
i watched you fade,
like a sepia print
washed away by tears
yet in the rain
no one guesses..
the colours of me
washed away,too.
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lost in a swirl
Joined your fanbase! You're killin' it with your dead on and quality posessed writings and such; I mean to say you're excellent when you write whatever... Rnoble74 Username
Much Peace, Sincerity and Respect,
Rich Aaron Norris
85- philip carey 61
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People want poetry to be spontaneous and perfect the first time. But the same advise applies to poetry as to prose: edit, edit, edit.
(But in the forums, not so much...)- 85
- philip carey 61
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People want poetry to be spontaneous and perfect the first time. But the same advise applies to poetry as to prose: edit, edit, edit.
(But in the forums, not so much...) - 85
- philip carey 61
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People want poetry to be spontaneous and perfect the first time. But the same advise applies to poetry as to prose: edit, edit, edit.
(But in the forums, not so much...) - 85
- philip carey 61
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People want poetry to be spontaneous and perfect the first time. But the same advise applies to poetry as to prose: edit, edit, edit.
(But in the forums, not so much...) - 85
- philip carey 61
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People want poetry to be spontaneous and perfect the first time. But the same advise applies to poetry as to prose: edit, edit, edit.
(But in the forums, not so much...) - 85
- philip carey 61
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Sorry about the repeat messages. I kept getting a weird error when I clicked the Submit button, making me think it didn't post, which it obviously did.
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Nice poem. I believe in living in a moment. It is only thing which is true. We change our past to our liking. We dream about our future. We live in a present, in a moment.
All the best from Beata
