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Sigh, this poem I'll let you figure out for yourself. Oh yes, I wrote it but I'm not in the mood to explain myself-you understand.This poem reminds me of a poem I did when I was fifteen that won third prize in a poetry competition that my grandmother, without consulting me, entered me into. Why don't I mention it? Because I consider it uncool...bragging if you will. Did I mention I had a poem or two published? No, because to me that's unimportant since my poetry is confessional (or personal) in nature. It's like publishing a fricking diary which is scary. Anyway, this poem is not one of my best but, then, I'm not receiving much money for it am I? Cha-ching! This one is free for whoever ever wants to read it, hate it, rate it, click it (hint, hint).
Break Up
Bent like a broken twig, I broke and tumbled from the tree,
tumbled, tumbled to my knees,
got caught in the wind, tumbled back and forth,
got caught by confusion’s gale force,
and couldn’t climb back up the tree,
so I tumbled along endlessly,
between the sun and sweet, melancholic rain,
I tumbled and tumbled in the pain.
Mud smeared, dry bark and truth in decay,
I decomposed and melted away,
to be reborn from beneath the soil,
with evergreen bark and leaves that coil.
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Thanks UK Wordsmith. Yes, there's always pain in the death of a relationship. Rebirth is the fun part as well as the lessons you no longer have to learn.
You also write a mean poem, nice to meet you !
Thanks, I appreciate that comment a great a deal :)
nice poem thanks for sharing
Thanks cookmon!
Sigh. Very well, I decided to be easy on the reader and explain this poem which really doesn't take a rocket scientist to understand, but maybe someone will find it difficult.
First of all let's start with the tree. The tree represents what? A family. A twig? A member of a family which can be marital in nature or not (marriage is just a piece of paper declaring a committment that exists in the first place). When a twig is part of a tree and it breaking off it doesn't feel like the most important part of the tree does it? No, it's an unimportant appendage that doesn't belong so it will break off.
Tumbling around represents strife...I'll let you take it from there.
Light represents what? Happiness, enlightenment, joy. There you go, you're starting to understand it. What about rain? Sorrow, unhappinesss-there you go. What happens when a twig tumbles around on the ground in the rain? It becomes muddy. And when it's in the sun? It dries up. Consider for a moment that mud represents a slew of terrible things that happen during a break-up as well as the unhappiness that accompanies it. Also imagine that dryness co-existing with the mud represents happiness, liberation. Got it? Well, you will tommorow when I finish this analysis. Good night.
Ok, I'm back but only because my son is hogging my laptop playing a video game so I can't finish my fricking project in a timely manner. Anyhow, where was I? "Climbing back up the tree" is symbolic of the stability of a relationship, hellish or otherwise. Yes, yes, even the worst relationships provides some form of stability despite the overwhelm satisfaction that eventually will come to pass from a split. Yes, maybe some of you ended a relationship but found certain benefits draw you back to your insignificant other because change, as we all know, is really not all that easy so you might find yourself wishing you were back in the relationship albeit with a different partner etc.
Anyway,"Sweet, melancholic rain" is not the intermingling of love and pain in this instance but an extreme form of a depression that accompanies tragedy.
"Decomposed and melted away" all happiness and sadness accompanying a separation caused your love for the insignificant other dies, so "to be reborn from beneath the soil" means you inevitably fall in love with someone else, your loving feelings are rejuvinated. "With evergreen bark and leaves that coil" means you are no longer an insignificant branch but a significant part of that new relationship, a healthy relation if you will that can only continue to grow.
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UK Wordsmith says:
7 months ago
After the pain of the death of a relationship, comes rebirth. The seed fell from the tree, was beaten around, and finally began a new tree. This is vivid writing Writer Rider. Thank you for your bravery in sharing the pain. This is the stuff that Blues music is made of.