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By Elena.

X Ray Vision of Sun by Larry Alvarez
X Ray Vision of Sun by Larry Alvarez

Dear Jane,

The other day, in passing and after a few drinks, you mentioned it'd be cool to receive one of my famous love letters. Just for kicks, you laughed, though you blushed a bit when you said it. Just to have your own very custom missive, to be able to flaunt it and feel above the others, you giggled.

In passing, rather distractedly, I muttered, "yeah, right." At the time, I thought your comment silly and funnily flattering, but mostly on the alcohol induced side. Nevertheless, after we parted ways, I got to thinking about it, and the idea took hold to go ahead and make you happy, what could the harm be, I'd also get a kick out of putting that smile on your face, that blush on your cheeks. So here I sit today, writing you one of my so-called famous love letters.

Would you know, Jane, that I need to prepare to write a love letter? That I need to take my mind to a calm and clear place where only you will feature? Do you understand that I will get inside my mind to see a Jane that only I can see? Let me tell you how this works, Jane.

I focus my thoughts on you, I draw a mental picture of your smile, your laughing eyes, your hands that move about like butterflies when you talk, your still youthful and shapely body, the sound of your voice, the sweet and at times intoxicating smell of your perfume, and sweep everything else off my mind. All my senses are on you, and the feelings I want to write about start emerging from places I didn't know existed.

I've got you in my mind's eye, Jane, and the picture I painted gives me pause. This should be a very easy to write love letter, baby.

As all my attention is on you, fine tuned to a woman only I can see, I realize I don't want to disappoint you, and instead of plowing ahead, I stop to wonder what things will make you shiver in silent excitement as you read, will make the hair at the back of your neck stand on end, will make your stomach churn with the truths being uncovered? What words of mine will make you blush? What thoughts on paper will leave you wanting that this letter lasts forever?

I'm anxious to find myself second-guessing what words of mine will make you want to stop and re-read to savor a paragraph. I'm uncharacteristically nervous that I don't know what you'll feel, now that you're reading your very own love letter, Jane, and I realize it matters what you'll think and what you'll feel as you read this.

I hope it makes you happy to read that I love you, Jane. I hope it makes you happy to read that I'm glad you asked for this letter, giggling and blushing, and I hope you asked for it because you really wanted it but didn’t know how to go about asking seriously, didn't know another way to tell me that you want me.

I can practically feel you blinking in my mind's eye as you read this. Did I get it right, Jane? Is this what you wanted to read in my letter? That I love you? I love you, Jane. If you only knew how easy it is to write this letter, how delicious and thrilling and liberating it feels to finally allow myself to focus all my thoughts on you, to unleash what was always there, hidden under all the love letters I ever wrote.

I hope this is the love letter that you wanted, I hope that you read it a thousand times, that you wear the paper thin from reading and re-reading, until you believe that this was the easiest of all love letters, and that my heart is in each and every single word within this page.

Yours,

E

 

P.S. How did I do?

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Amanda Severn profile image

Amanda Severn  says:
4 months ago

Lucky Jane to be held in such high esteem!

Feline Prophet profile image

Feline Prophet  says:
4 months ago

As command performances go, it was a winner I'm sure!

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Hey, Amanda - Jane's a lucky lady, isn't she? :-)

Feline, shall I take your order then?

Feline Prophet profile image

Feline Prophet  says:
4 months ago

LOL...doesn't take a love letter to make me purr...some lasagne will do it...but thanks anyway Elena! :)

Jess Killmenow profile image

Jess Killmenow  says:
4 months ago

A letter the recipient would be overjoyed to receive, and a pleasure to read here :)

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Cheers, Jess K! I take orders, you know? Just kidding :-)

Randy Behavior profile image

Randy Behavior  says:
4 months ago

Lovely Elena. Kind of sneaks up on you. :)

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

I am just getting my hub ready on Jane Eyre, when I found this...... I think it is for Jane Eyre, and I am her biggest fan and i will pretend it is for me...

i love to be told i am loved even if the person does not really know me at all..... take it from me and Jane Eyre you did good, is there a sequal????

Paris Injeans profile image

Paris Injeans  says:
4 months ago

How wonderful...to be so in touch with your feelings that you can express them so openly and so beautifully.

dohn121 profile image

dohn121  says:
4 months ago

What a powerful piece! I was all ears! Jane is a wonderful name...Let's name her Jane! She can be sweet like...Sugar Cane?

G-Ma Johnson profile image

G-Ma Johnson  says:
4 months ago

Great...just great and is how I write poems...when I do..Thanks...:O) Hugs

Frieda Babbley profile image

Frieda Babbley  says:
4 months ago

I'm going to pretend that I'm Jane, now. I hope you don't mind.

emohealer profile image

emohealer  says:
4 months ago

How very nice for Jane, beautifully written... if this is what can be conjured up on command what lies beneath the impulse must be more beautiful still. Excellent!!!

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Randy, did it? Sneak up on you? :-) Good, then!

Brenda, there can be a sequel if someone else requests another letter! And I'm glad the name did the trick for you!

Paris, yeah, I'm in touch with my feelings – maybe a tad too much, seeing as I can write on command about them :)

Dohn, all's in the name, eh? Don't think I had trouble to come up with it, either. I know this girl named Jane.... but that's a story for another day!

Hugs right back at you, G-Ma!

Frieda, why pretend when you can have you very own letter, darling? I'm but waiting that you just ask for it :-*

Emohealer, thank you! Who knows what lies beneath? Maybe that's a story for another day, too. I'm waggling my eyebrows as I type this :-)

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
4 months ago

Letters are so worth the wait if they are as heartfelt and as beautiful as this one, and specially if they come from somebody that matters :D

Frieda Babbley profile image

Frieda Babbley  says:
4 months ago

Okay, then. I'll ask for one. My dearest Eleni, would you write a love letter just to me?

Candie V profile image

Candie V  says:
4 months ago

"How do I love thee? Let me count the ways...." I know you meant to spell her name C-a-n-d-i-e. I forgive you because I love you!

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Cris, I agree. I do nothing but sit here and wait to get one of these, but it seems my fate is writing them, more than receiving them :)

Frieda, honey, you've got yourself a deal! This is going to be fun! Just, no presure on deadlines, all right? Laugh!

Candie, I ... I .... uhmmm .... oooookay... here, grab this kiss and forgive me for my spelling blunder :-)

Frieda Babbley profile image

Frieda Babbley  says:
4 months ago

Oh goodie! No deadline pressures! I shall await patiently.

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

hey everybody cant be Jane

I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s profile image

I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s  says:
4 months ago

This is beautiful! Love letters are sooo magical and how you approached this one is lovely.

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Brenda, certainly not, there's only one Jane in my heart. But then there is also a Maria, a Julia, a.... Maybe I better stop while I'm ahead... Laugh!

Invictus, merci beaucoup, I'm glad you found this lovely :-)

Linda Myshrall profile image

Linda Myshrall  says:
4 months ago

Elena, you have the most tastefully sensual, passionate, emotionally generous style. It is unique and all yours. Kudos. Who wouldn't want a letter like that?

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

i would not want a letter like that if tom dick and harry were getting one no way....... what is the point if it means nothing to the sender..... i would rip it up

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Linda, thank you for "getting it". I'm really and thoroughly gratified by your comment.

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Brenda, I was just kidding, I only have one woman in my heart and in my head, but this was, after all, a command performace :-) Many a poet has written on command before me, Cyrano comes to mind, for example :-) Not that I compare myself to that incredibly lovely and talented character, laugh!

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

o.k. then so be it..... who is Cyrano i must check that out

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Cyrano of Bergerac is the protagonist of the play of the same name, written by Edmond Rostand, a classic of unrequited love. Much recommended!

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

i believe you will check it out

Nanny J.O.A.T. profile image

Nanny J.O.A.T.  says:
4 months ago

Absolutely lovely! I do like how you describe the process - focus of the mind's eye - easy to say and yet the surprises that you get when you do :)

alekhouse profile image

alekhouse  says:
4 months ago

You asked: "How did I do?" I say you did great! Elena, you are so gifted.

The analysis you went through, as you were writing,

was really exciting. It created an opening, into which we as readers were allowed to peek and feel/savor your creative energy. Thank you for this.

And, Frieda, you can't pretend you're Jane, because I'm pretending I'm Jane.....:)

Also, I really don't think there's any such thing as being in touch with your feelings "too much", as long as you can exercise control over them when the situation calls for it.

Raven King profile image

Raven King  says:
4 months ago

Ay Mama you write sexy stuff!

Christoph Reilly profile image

Christoph Reilly  says:
4 months ago

Beautiful, Elena. I want one.

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Nanny, that's right, some things are unseen until you look within instead of outside :)

Thanks, Alekhouse! You guys don't need to fight, each o you can pretend all you want! I tend to agree with you, there's probably no such thing as being "too much" in touch with your feelings, the thing I doubt is always being able to control them on command :-)

Raven, if you say so :-*

Chris, I'm really exhausted from so much letter writing over the weekend, maybe next week, amigo!

Jewels profile image

Jewels  says:
4 months ago

I want one too. I get lust letters, not love letters.:(

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

I can do those too, Jewels -- but seeing as you already get your share ... :-)

Sally's Trove profile image

Sally's Trove  says:
4 months ago

Elena, I didn't want this letter to end. :) You had me totally engrossed with how your heart and mind revealed themselves, one layer being peeled back at a time, until the desires of the centers of both pushed through. I would simply die and go to heaven if I received this letter.

Great ending, that PS. Perfect! You could be asking us how you did, or asking Jane...I think I can almost see how you were smiling when you wrote those last words.

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Sally, you impress me with how well you seem to know me, apparently you can read me like an open book! :-) I admit I had a goofy smile the size of the Grand Canyon when I typed the P.S., exactly for the reason you mention.

I've had a few requests for custom letters, don't think I'd mind one bit doing one just for your lovely and smart self :-)

Sally's Trove profile image

Sally's Trove  says:
4 months ago

This lovely and smart self would be a boorish lout to refuse your kind offer. I do believe I may be at the bottom of the queue, and that is fine. I am patient. Abrazos!

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

so the sequel

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

so the sequel

Iphigenia profile image

Iphigenia  says:
4 months ago

You know already that I love this and that I'm hoping you have a single brother with the same talent to express passon and love .... I though I'd commented here .... I must have withdrawn up my tree to savour te delight.

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Hi, Iphigenia! My one remaining brother wouldn't know romanticism if it kicked him in the butt -- he's a good guy, but I can't recommend him for "correspondence", definitely not :-)

Iphigenia profile image

Iphigenia  says:
4 months ago

what about everything else then ?

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Everything else, I think he's fine. Drinks the usual amount of beer, smokes the usual amount of pot, cooks only if he'd die of hunger.... your regular male :-) Still interested? Laugh!

Iphigenia profile image

Iphigenia  says:
4 months ago

Always happy to consider a new toy boy.

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