How to Write a Bad News Business Letter
89Sometimes in business you simply cannot avoid writing a letter that has bad news. However, you can try to write the letter in such a way as to maintain a good relationship with the recipient, as well as breaking the bad news in the easiest way. You don’t want to burn any bridges in business, so it really is to your advantage to write an effective bad news letter.
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When writing the letter, your objectives should focus on:
- Minimizing damage to the relationship: Bad , news should not define the relationship.
- Showing that the decision is fair and reasonable: Imagine yourself in the reader’s shoes, and try to offer the best explanation possible.
- Stating the bad news clearly and firmly:
- Opening should have a buffer to minimize any damage to the relationship. Use a positive or neutral opening to maintain goodwill.
- Body should include reasons to help the reader see it from your point of view. You want to show that you are being both fair and reasonable. Be clear and firm about the bad news, but also be brief, positive, and low key about it.
- Closing should contain an appropriate gesture of goodwill, and perhaps a potential solution for the reader’s problem.
When writing your bad news business letter, use the Cheeseburger Structure:
Bad News Letter Example #1
Dear Bill,
Your invitation for me to act as chairperson for BCCJ’s upcoming Annual Auction Dinner is an honor. I enjoyed serving in that role last year. Your members are an excellent group with great ideas, and it was a privilege to work with them.
This year I am involved in developing a new department here at the clinic that is taking up all my time. As much as I would enjoy working with BCCJ again, I am afraid that I wouldn’t be able to give the duties the attention the project deserves.
Perhaps I may suggest one of my colleagues who would have the time to do the job the way it ought to be done. Give me a call if you are interested, and I will be happy to suggest some names for you. We want the industry to be well represented.
I wish you and the committee great success in achieving this year’s goal.
The letter was straight forward and polite. The writer provided an excellent reason for the refusal of the position, but also left the door open for a future relationship. As well, the writer provided a possible solution at the end.
Bad News Business Letter Example #2
Dear Ms. Hodges,
Thank you for ordering our professional Chinese wok set. You will find that wok-cooked foods are both delicious and quick to fix.
We have sent you an added bonus: 2 extra inches of cooking area, thanks to our supplier’s generosity. This 16-inch wok is more efficient than the advertised 14-inch wok. Now you can create Chinese meals with a professional flair with this package that includes cooking racks, chopsticks, a rice paddle, and a steel turner, in addition to a wok base and lid. To complete your collection, the skewers and cookbook will arrive by April 22.
Remember that Figby’s offers specialized items for all your cooking needs. Please stop by on May 10 for a free demonstration on preparing Japanese sushi. You may also want to take advantage of our special prices on Japanese cookware, which will only be available that week.
Sincerely,
Harry Figby
This bad news letter covers the fact that the wok Ms. Hodges ordered is not available by upgrading it to a better, bigger wok. As well, it is so positive in tone that the reader might not realize that the entire set she ordered hasn’t arrived on time, as two pieces of it will arrive later. This bad news letter did not focus at all on the negative, but delivered its message in a positive way. Harry Figby also extended an opportunity for a future relationship by informing Ms. Hodges of upcoming sales and events.
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Excellent hub Stacie!
I often have to deal with confrontation, and sometimes, it's EXTREMELY hard to start off in the positive, but you're absolutely right -- whenever I do things that way, the dialogue goes much smoother.
Great Hub! Great ideas! The organization of the letters really facilitates the point with professionalism, positiveness and flow. I like how you broke it down, then gave the two examples. Really well done.
I've used the approach of the second example many times--and its success really depends on the products you offer. Size, for example, is a very important feature for most people, and you should never assume that larger is better. In the second example, I'd first let the customer know that the product is unavailable and offer a solution - the larger product. Sending a product of different size without notice might create a lot of problems, especially with shipping, refunding, and losing goodwill no matter how positive you are.
Nice Hub. Nobody likes to hear bad news. I bet you are pretty good at the "breakup" speach too. LOL...
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I have written some hubs on business you may check this and advice.
Thanks,
Jyoti
i got a piece of bad news letter :-)
I liked the burger's example. Great example!
Thx! I like the cheeseburger structure
Hi Stacie! I teach Contemporary Business Communications for the University of Phoenix online, and we actually have an assignment related to this subject, which is why I chose to read this hub. You handled the subject impeccably well. As I would say to one of my students, you hit the ball out of the park!
Jim Henry, aka crashcromwell
Thanks Jim! Glad to hear others in the field find it applicable.
Stacie - great hub with a lot of useful information. I find myself having to write more of those bad news business letters lately. I'm going to keep the cheeseburger in mind!
Great and useful information. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Good Information. Great example...Thanks
Thanks for your useful information
Where i used to work we called the cheeseburger structure the s**t sandwich!
Thanks for the tips! Will come in handy!
These are great tips and it is very informative! Great hub
This hub gives the bad news in a good way, a great way to show how exactly to set out a "bad business letter", I have certainly learnt a bunch from the information you have provided on this page, thanks a lot!
Thanks for the key point to be more effective in writting.
How to Write a Bad News Business Letter
very good, I support you, come on , welcome to my hub!
Love the burger illustration. Really great hub.
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thanks for giving the best example.
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Really! if every bad news would be written on this format than there won't be damages in relationships..........


























stevemark122000 says:
2 years ago
Very useful information, thanks