Mute Semblance: A Red, Abstract Painting
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One of the reasons I like abstract painting is because this type of art has its own visual language and says things that can't be expressed in more realistic painting.
I could go into a lesson about abstract art, as there are many who do not appreciate it at all, and this due probably to misunderstanding. But--hey--this hub is not going to be about paintings, exactly, after all--instead, a poem from the poetry challenge.
Of course, free verse (is that still the term?) poetry is very much like abstract art--some appreciate it; others do not. And there are those of us who just cannot help ourselves--we write or paint as we are who we are. If I had to define it--I'd have to say the reason I like both is the fact that neither 'discipline' is obvious, which for me can get so boring. Also, I enjoy the exchange of tension, form, and light.
This poem is entered here again as a jpeg art file, to preserve the caesura and other punctuation which is important to the poem as a whole. (Sorry if it is distracting!)
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Thanks Chris! Yes, I get in a lyrical mood sometimes, lol... Compliments always mean something from a fellow artist.
Great poem, Lita. Lovely mood churned up by the dark water, and the flurry of snow, and the underlying red, turgid and stuck. The whole poem becomes visual impact (I'm not phrasing this correctly) and it's totally engaging. The paintings are wonderful, too -- the poem is a perfect accompaniment to them. This is the best poem I've seen so far in the Challenge, and I'm so glad it's not a competition, because you are such a strong writer. I'm typing this in a red dawn, by the way, the color of the sky complementing this whole moment, and a cold silver river underneath, like the bone in the painting above. Ah me. Life rocks, eh?
Well I ain't no artist, but I do Know some good lines when I read them.
TMG
Teresa-- Thank you! And I love your line, too, with "a cold silver river underneath, like the bone in the painting," I appreciate what you have said--because honestly, I wasn't that sure of this one. Kinda funny how that is.
TMG-- Thanks--you often have good lines in the stuff you right in the forums yourself, I've noticed. :)
I just sat back and stared and stared and stared at Johannissen's piece. And great poety, too! The fragmentation brings a nice rhythm. And yes, it's a pity we can't play much with our own poems' form in the text capsule. Anyway, thanks for sharing :D
Thank you, Chris A--Some have figured out the html or rich text or whatever it is to get the desired text effects. I'm just to lazy, and I have long nails--don't want to learn more code, lol. And yes--I'm lovin those ceasuras these days--not sure why. :)
Interesting, though I should point out that you mispelled "ceasura". Furthermore, caesurae are relevant to poems that have meter. They are not mere poetic alternatives to punctuation or occasions for creative formatting. Nice attempt.
LOL! Diction always speaks volumes. Yeah, looks like I transposed the a&e in caesura--which of course has more than one acceptable spelling. Let poetic alternatives to poets, not to brittle academicians. When you have had similar poems with such devices published at MIT, SUNY and the U of Illinois, you don't don't need the validation of hotbabesin nyc.
Gee, thanks for reading! Really. You've convinced me to send this one out with a dedication--let you know when it appears and what journal, ;)
Red Night I and Untitled are both outstanding. Red Ice 3 seems a bit predictable.
The poem is, pleasant.
I was introduced to poetry via E.E. Cummings. Don't remember what or even when but he stuck in my head stylistically. I'm not up on all the formal terminology but respect its use by those who are.
So, HotBabes, meowww. Who gives a rats ass?
Hi, CWB--
Red Night I I'd consider the little more predictable of the three--but everyone has a right to their own taste.
I believe some worry the poem was not that 'pleasant,' lol, but I'd say it's their reaction. And hey--I'm gonna agree with Teresa's assessment--of course! Then again, I know this will be published, too. That should be fun, I might add.
Thanks for your comment. Yeah, ee cummings does a little of the same thing as this one does with the cadence. :)
I just...lol..love how the traffic history on this one jumps at certain points. :( aaah, sorry. Was not to be a bad thing, really...btw, old picture is better & more professional...last time I checked, ;).
I really like this work. I like your write up on the work as well.
Thanks, shannhuds.
Christoph Reilly says:
10 months ago
Very nice! I like the art, the second and third more than the first.
The poem is lovely too. I love the line:
"Red is but one significant shade of this music...it glows
from above and below like illumination...or fire"
But I was also grabbed by the last stanza:
"Above and beneath so you see shimmering rifts
Like moonlight crossing slowly the water
Like touch, not paint"
That's just lovely!