I bought my copy directly from Stokely Gittens himself at NecronomiCon. I like him, and I mean this review to be constructive criticism.

Peter Paul is rough, but it shows potential. Mr. Gittens would benefit from a better editor, a better proof reader, and better type setting. To a lesser extent he would also benefit from technical consultants in military and police matters and medicine.

He, like all writers, myself included, needs a good editor to keep him honest. Several of his scenes are just crying out for better development, and an editor would help with this.

Peter Paul has many errors in English, mis-spellings, and odd word choices. A proof reader would point these out so Mr. Gittens could fix them. I cannot stress enough the importance of a good proof reader.

The formatting, particularly of many of the dialog scenes, is wrong. This is where a good type setter would come in, because someone with experience in typesetting would be able to fix these problems easily.

Asking some questions of people with experience in areas about which you are writing is a good way to keep from losing readers with experience in those areas. These people, even if they aren't professional consultants are called "technical consultants". When a writer writes science fiction he enters into a contract with his reader. The reader agrees to a certain suspense of disbelief, and the writer agrees to not stretch that suspense of disbelief too far. Several scenes in Peter Paul stretch suspense of disbelief to the breaking point. Asking a few questions of people with experience in certain areas would solve this problem.

Those things said, Peter Paul: The Chase Begins shows a lot of potential, and I look forward to seeing more from Stokely Gittens as he improves in the art, and especially in the craft of writing.