Unwind In Trine
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**This poem may be more striking while listwning to the music :) ***
A thought
A moment
Complete unfoldment
A whisper
As air
Ensures you're still here
A glance
Yet chance
Brought us to a dance
A touch
Of trust
Is surely now a must
A feeling
I'm reeling
Stuck to the ceiling
A sound
You're around
Coax me gently down
A chase
Some space
In your embrace
In movement
Coilment
Dual heart's envelopment
A st-udder
Or shudder
A question of fate
A reaction
Distraction
Collecting of heart placed
A glowing
Is showing
Two souls have found their place
Shall time
Never bind
To blind from this place
A knowing
Is a showing
The presence of state
In time
Realize
Created destiny on a plate.
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you are always a fun read Invictus!
this is awesome and it fits for me right now, thanks for this rb
dori
I like this one, very good.
I love it! It mesmerised me when I tried to come up with my own tune :)
dohn 121~ Thank you very much! Quite a comment! =)
Randy~ I greatly appreciate you enjoying my works! Always great to see you1 :)
fortunerep~ I am very glad you liked this. I wish you an abundance of happiness! :)
wesleycox~ Thank you so much!
shammelabboush~ Thanks for the lovely words. Feel free to hit the play button *hint* *hint*! ;)
I liked this, well set out !
badco~ Very glad you liked it! Many blessings! :)
I am here. I HEAR and SEE your SOUL. BEAUTIFUL!!!!!! Thank you for sharing. ():-) SHINE ON ():-)
A.I.M.~ Thank you very much for the beautiful words! =)
This poem had a couple of inspirations...have not heard from one for awhile! Hopefully they are well.... Thanks for sharing!
I love the sense of repeating time (if that's what you were going for, it's what I picked up). Give me more!
A.I.M ~ Thank you for being here, btw!!:)
Well, hello Howard! I thank you for stoppiong by! :) ~You know, this poem is a bit nostolgic, yes! I feel it as a dance I have swayed to, many times!A feel good sway. ;) ~What kind of "more" would you like? I am open for requests! Just let me know, ok!
what ever is honest.
Great to hear, Howard. That is pretty much how it is...honest! Thanks again. :)
Pretty much?
I like it .....
LOL!! ;) Howard...if you know now me...it is completely honest! I take a bow and zip me lip? Nahhhh! LOL xD
Brenda ~ I am glad you made it here and like it!! I am way wound in my life right now...hope the move is serving you well! Great to see you about... I may just be popping in. :)
yeah i sense the astral atmosphere, it's almost in trance. thanks for sharing, I enjoyed the read :D
Ooooo... your radar is keen, Cris! lol ~Thanks for coming by and commenting! :D
Wonderful exploration with music thanks!
Thanks, wengelman! I greatly appreciate it!
Love the structure.
Thanks, Jess Killmenow! :)
Only a few words and all is said !
XTASIS ~ I here you! Thanks for your words, I appreciate them. :)
Great poem with or without music!
Superb! Inspiring words and adding Enya just sealed the significance in meaning to your poem. I am fortunate fan! I do not want to miss poems like this ever!
Writer Rider ~ Thanks so much...greatly appreciated! :)
AIDY ~ Oh my, your words means so much to me, thank you!! You are so inspiring and your praise of my works is held dear. I don't know what has happened...yet I have transcended to a place that is very new for the length and depth it has lasted...sometimes painful because it it does not come with a SWITCH to turn off. Difficult to explain...very auspicious, indeed! :)
just read this again now i am back on line hooray.... hope i can be inspired to write again soon
Wooo Hooo!!! :D :D :D
feel a poem coming on... have you seen the one in the forum written line by line.... why not join in
feel a poem coming on... have you seen the one in the forum written line by line.... why not join in
Hey, me too...have peaked in the forum, yes :) ~ I am a bit shy of the forum... maybe I will join..we'll see. lol ~ went for a nice drive today to clear my head a bit, I have a lot on my mind. Writing something fresh would feel so nice!
hope you enjoyed the drive and your head is cleared... jump into the forums you wont look back..... speak soon
hope you enjoyed the drive and your head is cleared... jump into the forums you wont look back..... speak soon
Very nicely done. unwinds in a simple manner, leading the reader through a beautiful path
eh invictus without the stars you are getting popular, i am getting jealous
cre8iv ~ Thanks so much for the lovely comment! :)
ha ha Brenda... your funny :).....please don't take me stars away!! lol ~
just want to thank you for your friendship you really make me smile..... retiring now, speak soon ... thanks again.
:) ~ thanks, Brenda! I enjoy our friendship as well! see ya soon.. goodnight :)
A lovely swath of syncopated syllables...Thank you for this mind-treat...Larry
Larry ~ Thanks, for the sweet remarks! :)
very moving and what a wonderful job.
Dream on ~ I'm glad you like it, thank you!
Superb - love your unique style of free flowing poetry, that I don't have to sift through to enjoy the full message of what is being said. Remarkable.
Denizee ~ Your words are so thoughtful and lovely. Thank you so much! :)
Wonderful, loved the enya.
Thanks a lot, lxxy! I so appreciate your coming by!
Wish my eye hadn't caught on Cabin Girl's comment above about Unwind in Urine:-). Otherwise, I love the beat of this and the flow of the lines. Like a waterfall cascading down rocks, but not totally freeflowing. Like steps.
It's nice to see someone who enjoys toying with the words of affection! MM
MM ~ Hey, I hear you with CB's comment! It did seem an attempt to put a sour scent on my page, lol! I did consider deleting it, yet wouldn't want to be another spoilsport!
Although, I have changed my mind comment gone! :)
I greatly appreciate your comment, truly all these comments help ne grow in writing... Thank you! :)
They've said it all above Great Poem I'm a new fan..
Hmrjmr1 ~ Thank you so much, so greatly appreciated and can I say a huge honorable thank you for being so brave and just to have placed your life in line for me and those of many cultures whom benefit from you! :)
Oh you have got it baaad! hehe I am so proud of you my dear one. Such love, such prose, such wonderfulness I cannot express. Now go away or I shall seranade you a second time.
what you listening to at the moment.... music wise
CC ~ :) Thanks..hah ah..Greatly appreciated!! :)
I ain't, it's in me head and my parrot was whistling a tune also. hehe if I only had a brain haha, he's a hoot.
Ahhhh, is that to say he is a bit of a scare-d-cat-parrot! lol
I love the layout and it s like music, very goodly indeedy
cindyvine ~ Thanks a bunch!! So great to see you, it's been a while... Very much appreciate you reading my works!! :)
Yeah, don't get to read many hubs anymore, and checked out two of yours today!
Thanks much... I read the internet connection is strained where you are. Is ther any hopes for it to yet better soon?? Are you still writing books and teaching where you live? Great to see you ! :)
Yep, am still writing books and teaching and getting frustrated with the internet! It's taking over an hour to upload pics onto Facebook!
Great to hear you're still writing and teaching...Geez, such a bummer to hear about the Internet, arrrr!!! You'd think that with all this advanced technology and satellite's that if would not really matter where one lives these days... All the best!! I'll surely keep an eye out for when you're about here on HP.. Cheers :)
wow, I couldn't get the music to play but I can see that this writing has a rhythm to it. Incredible writing. I really
am enjoying the different ways that you write.
cindyleedavis ~ Thanks so much. It was a lovely vibrant feeling, for sure. :) Enya is very inspirational to me...I lke listening to her whilst writing! :)
good stuff! you have the ability to stir up some feeling with words.
Thats a talent I wish I had!
Thumbs up!
:)
Thank you, J-ART! So happy to here.
a talent such as yours is soooooo rare
coax me please brilliant hub.....
Miss Take ~ Your praise warms me and sets and inspirational twinge! Thank you. :)
Poet ~ You don't seem the type that needs coaxing! Thanks so much for all of your caring, encouragement, and friendship! :D
I am very grateful...through and through.
dohn121 says:
5 months ago
Hypnotic, invictus. I was spellbound.