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By Cris A

                             the barrio is a patch of green made orphan
                             by water that is as long and as unwinding
                             as the tales of loves and woes of the people
                             whose lives cling to it but curse it...for when
                             day becomes night, tonques once beholden
                             turn vicious and vile, prophesying death and
                             evil once the river's veil is lifted by the dark.

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as the moon creeps up to the infinite skies,
its face fully illumined by the sun beyond,
alabaster, purposeful feet scurry, barely
touching the moss that's deep in slumber.
but the now hollowed ground, familiar with
the flight, is alive and whispering in muted
grace, "make haste" it says, "make haste".

 

                             the light of Aurora drenches the river, quietly 
                             seeping through layers of water to a shadowy 
                             world until it touches the skin from memories
                             born. insubstantial but yet manifested, it stirs
                             and consents benevolenly, rousing the heart
                             that never died or forgot, and that for many 
                             a sun, lay in wait to surface and behold again.

the drumming of her heart she cannot quell as
her anticipation is as heavy as the moist air
that clings to the slender grass, bent, scattered
like the black pebbles on which she descends
breathlessly but collected like her threadbare
skirt. as the cool water becomes nothing, her
eyes absorb the gossamer glow from the river.

                              compelled, but not by the moon, she ascends
                              from the depths of forgetfulness like a ripple
                              seen from the after to before. with a nostalgic
                              ache that she cannot place, she breaks the
                              surface of the calm water into a softness so
                              familiar she weeps. as her tears become one
                              with the river.she looks to where she always is.

 

                                                    seduced by the light, all else is banished - the
                                                    heart soaked in despair, the legends passed
                                                    from tongue to tongue - for after all, radiance,
                                                    surely, is not the lonely devil's cloak. her hair
                                                    from a distance brings bliss, what more the
                                                    face that remains a mystery? the broken man
                                                    failed by the bottled spirits feels whole again.

her core escapes her and momentarily soars,
then shatters into a million stars, cascading to
the ground like the falls that have formed in
her eyes. finally, the girl that the world forgot
is found and time stands still to reveal what
she knows all along, that her visage that looks
like no other's, was somebody else's before.

                             she wails but nothing is heard, only music that
                             sends the birds from stupor to flight. the wings
                             of black fanning the memories back. of her days
                             in the sun, of the water on her feet, of a lover's 
                             hand in her hair. but the sweetest she recalls,
                             before their malice sunk her to the blackness,
                             is a child's face that must mirror her very own.

                                                     little by little, emboldened by the second, he
                                                     goes to where his lover awaits. even the birds
                                                     awake to witness the ethereal moment. there
                                                     is music as silt and stones drag his feet further,
                                                     cool, welcoming. his breath leaving him making,
                                                     space for release and perdition. but what is life
                                                     if he cannot see her face? he's near her at last.

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                              the barrio is a patch of green made orphan
                              by water that is as long and as unwinding
                              as the dreams of a young woman exiled by
                              the wrong kind of love. but as the sun rises
                              her emptiness departs like the diaphanous
                              remnants of a nightmare. seeing the lady
                              might never be again, but she knows where
                              she will always be. and she will always be.

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This narrative was inspired by the kundiman (traditional Filipino love song) 'Mutya ng Pasig' (The Gem/Muse of Pasig - music by Nicanor Abelardo, words by Deogracias Rosario) and the 1950s movie of the same name.

The kundiman, written in 1926, tells the story of a lady who appears in the Pasig river when the moon is full and sings of a kingdom of love where she was a princess. The kingdom vanished because "love died" but will rise again if love is given back to her. The movie, on the other hand, delves deeper into the story of the lady. Supposedly, she was a thing of beauty coveted by many men in the barrio including a rich and powerful landlord. The landlord had her lover banished from the barrio and forcefully took her as his wife. When she gave birth to their child, he noticed a black mark somewhere on the child's back. Thinking that it was a sign that the child was not his, he drove out his wife one rainy night sending dogs after her until her only escape was the river. The child, a girl, was sent to live with the landlord's servants and grew up believing she's an orphan. When the moon is full, a lady manifests before her. But she's not the only one who can see her.

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Ralph Deeds profile image

Ralph Deeds  says:
4 months ago

Nice poem. Reminded me of this one

http://www.boppin.com/lorca/faith.html

jiberish profile image

jiberish  says:
4 months ago

I really enjoyed that. Thank you

dohn121 profile image

dohn121  says:
4 months ago

I liked this cris. It's one part ballad and two parts poetry. Being a patriot of the Philippines, I'm sure you know who Carlos Bulosan is--America is in the Heart is one of my favorites and is one of the best novels (if not the best) immigration novel to date. His book first introduced me to the word "barrio." Wonderful job on this cris.

Beautiful descriptions. You gotta teach me how to indent stanzas like this. I want to learn!

Jess Killmenow profile image

Jess Killmenow  says:
4 months ago

Vivid and creative, Cris. I loved reading it.

Randy Behavior profile image

Randy Behavior  says:
4 months ago

Bewitching Cris! There are so many delicious sentences in there. I'll have to read it several more times to soak it all in I think. Thanks for the backstory too!

Frieda Babbley profile image

Frieda Babbley  says:
4 months ago

Exquisite. I love the story. Randy says it well when she calls it bewitching. My favorite is the second to last stanza. Awesome (the real meaning, not the overused).

Shalini Kagal profile image

Shalini Kagal  says:
4 months ago

Love the way you use the fonts to tell the story - haunting, poignant, clutching at the heartstrings - and so incredibly artistic!

Triplet Mom profile image

Triplet Mom  says:
4 months ago

As always absolutely wonderful. Very moving and visual.

frogdropping profile image

frogdropping  says:
4 months ago

Again, another wonderfully evocative piece of work. Beautifully accompanied by your signature graphics. And loved the last one picture.

I noticed her when I re-read the poem.

Am I dead, yet? profile image

Am I dead, yet?  says:
4 months ago

Cris,

Beautiful. Just beautiful. Enchanting read as well. I adore stories like these, and your creativity. The two images are superb! I enjoy it when you include the history behind your work. It makes your work more valuable and unique. The construct of your stanzas are art in form as well. As always Cris, an amazing work

Teresa McGurk profile image

Teresa McGurk  says:
4 months ago

You really are a very good poet. This unfolds with quiet insistence, and I think that's one of your strengths as a writer -- way cool. And beautiful, as everyone else has said.

Jewels profile image

Jewels  says:
4 months ago

Chris that was beautiful. Interestingly I am aware of the Pasig through a friend who is helping relocate some families from the slums to a new life, and cleaning her up. I find the myths and stories of water symbolic of the flow of life and our rivers and streams mirror us.

Whikat profile image

Whikat  says:
4 months ago

Hi Cris, the images and the words are beautiful. I do not know why, but this one made me cry? I guess it reminds me of life, sad, but beautiful. Thanks for sharing. :-)

Elena. profile image

Elena.  says:
4 months ago

Breathtaking, ethereal, mysterious... and it doesn't escape me that the form and setup of the piece flows and ondulates JUST like a river .... you are THE poet, for the mind and the eye. Besos.

I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s profile image

I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s  says:
4 months ago

This has left me quite speechless with how to comment! Simply divine and brilliant. I agree with Elena regarding the setup as well. Geez, I feel works like this will keep me in a flowing state of bliss! :D ~ How are you doing?? Noticed you have not been around to since you posted this! If you are anything like me...maybe you are recovering from the depth feeling seeping through this piece! Take care of yourself! :D

G-Ma Johnson profile image

G-Ma Johnson  says:
4 months ago

Amazing you are simply amazing...Thanks for such wonderful hubs my dear...:O) Hugs

\Brenda Scully  says:
4 months ago

Hi such depth to this poem...... loved the graphics,,,, and the sensuality within the poem came through nicely.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

my friends

thanks for reading and leaving wonderful comments. :D

alekhouse profile image

alekhouse  says:
3 months ago

Very nice, Cris, as always.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

Oh you know the right things to say! LOL Thanks alek, I'm flattered :D

Iphigenia profile image

Iphigenia  says:
3 months ago

Hi Cris - this is quite different to the other poems of yours that I have read, but just as exquisitely crafted and written without one word too many or one phrase too few.

This poem possessed me as I read it - it is like an enchanting spell.

Christoph Reilly profile image

Christoph Reilly  says:
3 months ago

Very lyrical, and I loved getting the backstory. Such legends intrigue me, and your work befitted the lushness of the myth!

k@ri profile image

k@ri  says:
3 months ago

Enchanting, beautiful...I have shivers running down my spine. Thanks! :D

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

Julie

I was actually listening to I Got a Spell on You when I was writing this - I guess it shows! LOL Thanks for reading :D

Hey Chris

Yeah I was intrigued too when I chanced upon the song again just recently. Thanks for the kind words my friend.

k@ri

Wait for my Halloween poety! Ha! LOL Anyway, thanks for checking and commenting :D

Ginn Navarre profile image

Ginn Navarre  says:
3 months ago

Simply loved it--loved it and those graphics are beautiful.

Uriel profile image

Uriel  says:
3 months ago

Cris, this is striking lovely and i don't know what else to say. I mean it is a whole story woven within its own storyline and also a pool of emotions wrapped with sensational imagery. It flows just like the river sending different reflections of what is yet to be discovered in every line. I don't know really how to describe this but every hub you publish raises cheers and applause. You always beat yourself and always come up with something genuine. To this i have to salute you :D

blondepoet profile image

blondepoet  says:
3 months ago

This is just unbelievably good. Honest your work is amazing and I adore it. (hugs) xo

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

@Ginn

Thanks for reading and commenting. The pleasure is mine as always ;D

Uriel

Your reading it and commenting is good enough. Glad you liked it :D

BP

What a nice thing to say. Thanks :D

Uriel profile image

Uriel  says:
3 months ago

commenting is enough....Man i'd throw myself off a river for that one...LOL ...You make your point hard to miss Cris when you write...Memorable and amazing as well :D

ALways glad to be one of your biggest fans though :D

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

Uriel

And I appreciate your always being there for the push, so thanks my friend for always checking in on me. :D

amyjosprague profile image

amyjosprague  says:
3 months ago

very nice, well written

do you dabble in flash fiction? you're a natural--nice, to the point, evocative in less words makes it all the stronger

good job!

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

amy

I don't, at least not intentionally! LOL anyway, thanks for reading, liking and commenting :D

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arunchinega  says:
3 months ago

This poem was a journey into another world. Please also visit http://impressivemusings.wordpress.com/

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

arun

Really? Wow thanks for the compliment. I'll check out the link :D

meteoboy profile image

meteoboy  says:
3 months ago

Cris A , we know poetry is a unique ability for a man. I really i am pretty impressive from this peace of art.thank you. Greetings from Hellas . My best to you.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-IUU56Q9R60

Stolas profile image

Stolas  says:
3 months ago

Thank you very much, I find great inspiration in this. Very wordy, perhaps elusive... Altogether a work of art. I cannot wait to read more.

Uriel profile image

Uriel  says:
3 months ago

CRISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS i was searching for your newest hub!!! WHERE IS IT??? I can't wait so you better get back to work and write us something breath taking !@!!!

still4real profile image

still4real  says:
3 months ago

WOW...IT TOOK ME TO MANY PLACES...

one2get2no profile image

one2get2no  says:
3 months ago

I love this....thank you

Jerilee Wei profile image

Jerilee Wei  says:
3 months ago

Can't believe I missed this when you first published it. Excellent, excellent, excellent.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

meteoboy

Thanks for reading. Now I wonder what the link is about - will check it out!

Stolas

Thanks for the kind words, glad you liked this

Uriel

I haven't gotten down to writing a new material. sorry. but will try to get back on the saddle as soon as possible if only to appease you. Haha

still4real

well i hoped you liked where this one led you.

one

thanks for dropping a line.

jerillee

glad you finally found it. thanks for always reading.

:D :D ;D

juhi basoya profile image

juhi basoya  says:
3 months ago

Dear Chris,

What can I say? Awesome.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

hey juhi

that would do! LOL seriously, thanks for reading and dropping a line :D

ralwus profile image

ralwus  says:
3 months ago

I can't begin to say what this does to me and in no way can I tell any better than those before me. I just need to quit my poetry altogether and let you reign oh great one. She's kind of like Aphrodite.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

Hey C!

I'll print out your comment and head onto a retirement village - it should validate that my poetry at least amounted to something and I can retire (not to mention rendered a poet of your calibre momentarily speechless!)

Thanks for reading my friend. I hope all is well with you :D

ralwus profile image

ralwus  says:
3 months ago

I'm well enough son to comprehend your style and the knitting of our language which is not your own. You have learned to knit the ol' alphabet damn good! most excellent! love now, CC

I yearn to kiss you as I do my own sons

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

Of course, you of all people should know where I'm coming from. I guess that makes us peas of the same pod? As words are both our poison and passion. And I miss you too, but let me think about the kissing part! LOL

I'm sending all my love to you :D

ralwus profile image

ralwus  says:
3 months ago

*smiling*hugs now

Nisha shan  says:
3 months ago

Water is known for the calmness and the poem you have written is so cool as well.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

Nisha

That's a cool way of describing this. Thanks :D

mirajraha profile image

mirajraha  says:
3 months ago

Bloody hell! you're a master.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

mirajraha

That's a little too much, but but BUT I like it! LOL thanks for reading and dropping a line :D

\Brenda Scully  says:
3 months ago

hi wonder if you are still around on here somewhere... and how the hell are you........

Tom Cornett profile image

Tom Cornett  says:
3 months ago

Even tho haunted at heart....I smiled....awesome! :) LYM!

arunjain1989 profile image

arunjain1989  says:
3 months ago

Loved it...Unbelievable depth in your poem...keep writing!!

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

@Brenda - have my head barely above work. but i'm okay :D

@Tom - aha! it's nice to make you smile minus hm some garden stuff! :D

@arun - thanks, you are took kind :D

KyonSOS23 profile image

KyonSOS23  says:
3 months ago

nice poem I hope will see poem other too.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

kyon

i hope so too! LOL thanks for reading and dropping a line :D

DRG Da Real Grinc profile image

DRG Da Real Grinc  says:
3 months ago

nice one

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

DRG

Thanks! Glad you liked it :D

Benjimester profile image

Benjimester  says:
3 months ago

Yo Cris. That poem was fantastic! Reminded me a lot of the main river I often visited in Phnom Penh, Cambodia. The largest river was in the capital city and was bordered by a brick walkway and short wall, and people would always be walking along and sitting on the wall. It was really cool to be around.

I loved your poetic story. Thanks for sharing.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

hey benji

thanks. glad you liked this one :D

emievil profile image

emievil  says:
3 months ago

Wow, I'm speechless. I mean - Sambahin!!!! hehehe don't know how to write this in English so used the Tagalog word instead. =)

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
3 months ago

emi

Tagalog or English, I think I get what you mean (LOL) so thanks! Glad you liked it :D

Tatjana-Mihaela profile image

Tatjana-Mihaela  says:
3 months ago

Wow, beutiful, I am deeply touched (at the your poem brought tears in my eyes....)

Thank you.

Tatjana-Mihaela profile image

Tatjana-Mihaela  says:
2 months ago

...I meant to say "at the end" your poem...etc.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
2 months ago

Tatjana

I hope it was a good cry. Thanks for reading :D

sheenarobins profile image

sheenarobins  says:
2 months ago

You're simply on e of a kind, Cris. I hope that you continue to nurture and spread your wings on this avenue. No one does it better.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
2 months ago

well I hope so too, if retirement doesn't get me first! LOL thanks for dropping by :D

sheenarobins profile image

sheenarobins  says:
2 months ago

LOl. still awake? signing out now! got to get up early. I was on your flower hub but I can't concentrate anymore and could not grasp everything. need to read it again. nyt and have fun.

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
2 months ago

You can say I'm making up for lost time. :D Don't worry, my hubs will not go anywhere. Gnyt, my friend! :D

armsekram profile image

armsekram  says:
2 months ago

It was a new feeling. Amazing.

sohi profile image

sohi  says:
2 months ago

Nice Poem... awesome :))

Beata Stasak  says:
2 months ago

Great poem, I have learnt something new about a poem from a different culture, thank you for that. I am of Eastern European origin and I have tried some of my own, maybe you can read it and gives me some suggestion. You are a great poet, every help is greatly appreciated.

Kim Garcia  says:
2 months ago

Lovely and romantic!! I enjoyed its symbolism and depth!! Thanks for sharing.

Peace!! ~K

Cris A profile image

Cris A  says:
2 months ago

@armsekram, sohi

Glad you enjoyed the read.

@Beata

I would love to, perhaps you should provide me with a link to your poetry?

@Kim

Thanks for reading and commenting.

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