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Writing in Third Person Point of View

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By Marisa Wright


Most authors today write their novels in Third Person Subjective. What on earth is that, you ask? Actually, it's easier to say what it's not. It's not the Omniscient Narrator - the kind of Third Person used by Jane Austen - able to flit from scene to scene, seeing everything as if the author was a movie camera, and able to step outside the story to talk directly to the reader. Very few authors write like that any more, because modern readers like to get involved with the characters - and the Omniscient Narrator doesn't get inside the characters' heads and involve us in their thoughts and feelings.

Of course, you can get inside a character's head very easily in First Person - pick your character, and make him tell the whole story ("I did this" and "I did that"). But there's a snag!


In First Person, you must write things the way your character sees them
In First Person, you must write things the way your character sees them

Why First Person is Limiting

When you write in First Person, your reader sees all the action through that person’s eyes. If you start writing about things your character can’t see, you shatter the illusion and confuse the reader.

So, if you’re writing in First Person, you can’t describe events that happen when they're not there – you have to invent other ways to relate those events, such as getting other characters to report on them, or have your hero/heroine read a letter or newspaper about them.

Another important restriction is that your First Person character also can't see inside the heads of the other protagonists. That means you can’t report on other characters’ thoughts or motivations – all you can do is interpret them based on what your character sees, (“I could tell by his eyes that he didn’t believe me” rather than “he thought I was lying”).

There is one way around this problem – you can use a style which clearly sets your character up as a narrator, constantly making asides to the reader - saying things like, “Unknown to me, while I was cheerfully planning my holiday, Sadie was planning to ruin it”. However, it's still limiting, because it still isn't believable to recreate unseen scenes in vivid detail - and that can affect the overall colour and excitement of your story.

Why Third Person Subjective is Useful

The great benefit of Third Person Subjective is that you get inside the head of more than one character, just as thoroughly as if you were writing “I” - and you can then swap your POV (point of view) to another character when you need to, to describe an event that they witness, or explore their feelings about it.

Apart from being able to bring all the action vividly to life, regardless of who’s there, the other advantage of Third Person Subjective is that it provides a choice of characters for your readers to identify with. Some of your readers may want to be the heroine, whereas others may identify better with the hero. By including scenes or chapters “inside” both heads, you appeal to both sets of readers instead of just one.

The crucial thing when using Third Person Subjective is that the reader must always know who's telling the story. That's easier if you keep the number of different POV's to a minimum. Your hero and heroine are obvious choices, plus you may want to include the villain, or another key character - but any more than three or four, and the reader's going to lose track of who's who! That's why, if you are going to use Third Person Subjective, you should never be tempted to slip back into Third Person Omniscient at any time - because it's adding another POV.

It's important to really get into the heads of your characters when writing in Third Party Subjective.  Think of it like this - YOU are not writing your novel any more. Your characters are! Become an actor: before you start each scene, decide who you're going to "be" in that scene. Picture the scene through that character's eyes. Really imagine yourself as that person. Now write the scene from their perspective, including their innermost thoughts and reactions. Describe what he sees, smells, tastes.

"Rules" for Writing in Third Person Subjective

When you start out with Third Party Subjective, it's a good idea to set yourself a rule - only change POV when you start a new scene. Again, the goal is to avoid confusing your reader. For instance, say you're writing a scene between two lovers. You're telling the story from the woman's POV and you suddenly feel you need to let the reader know what HE is thinking - so you switch into his POV. Oh, but now you need to show HER feelings - so you switch again, and so on. This is called head-hopping and to the reader, it's rather like watching a tennis match. It's hard to keep your eye on the ball!

By barring yourself from changing POV's mid-scene, you're going to force yourself to ask two things - "did I choose the right person to tell this scene?" and, "How can I convey the other person's reactions without switching?". By asking these questions, you'll learn how to choose the right POV more reliably, and you'll also discover ways to hint at a character's feelings by their movements or dialogue.

Once you've gained confidence this way, you can relax your guard and allow yourself to change POV once - but only once, please! - in each scene. Of course you'll find authors who break that rule and get away with it: however if you're tempted to switch more often, you need to be sure you've examined your reasons for doing so, and that it's definitely the best way (not just the laziest way) to achieve your goal.

The ability to switch POV can make you lazy: it's very easy to start hopping into different heads all over the place, to let the reader know something important - especially if you're writing a suspenseful plot. You know your characters well, so you have no trouble working out whose head you're in: but your readers will get very confused if you hop around too much. And if you think about it, you'll often find a better way of conveying that information than introducing yet another POV.

More Point of View Tips

Finally - each time you switch POV, make sure the reader knows by leaving an extra line space between your paragraphs, then using the new POV character's name in the first line. To make it more obvious, combine that with a thought which obviously belongs to that character. For instance:

"Paul picked up the vase. It looked like something from a junk shop - surely she didn't believe it was valuable?"

Once you're in a POV, remember that the character doesn't think of himself by name. So don't use his name again while you're "in" that character's head (you may need to drop the name in occasionally to distinguish him from another character, but that should be the only time you use it). Your POV character is just "He" or "She" as much as possible. Don't be tempted to use their name just because you want to vary the first word of your sentences - there are plenty of other ways to do that!

Used well, Third Person Subjective can really enrich your novel, imbuing it with all the thoughts and emotions of your characters and making them very real to your reader. It takes practice, but it is worth it!

 

Text copyright Marisa Wright.  Photo thanks to Sabrina Campagna on Flickr.

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Sue Adams profile image

Sue Adams  says:
5 weeks ago

Good tips Marisa. I had a lot of autobiographical material which I translated into the 3rd person to make it into a novel. The third person subjective puts the characters on a more even level. Novel writing is really challenging. It's like a huge puzzle where you spend more time working out the logistics (making sure it all makes sense within the whole structure) than actually telling the story.

James Agbogun profile image

James Agbogun  says:
5 weeks ago

Useful Info.

Gendarme profile image

Gendarme  says:
5 weeks ago

Great literary depth reminiscent of the good old-fashioned way of writing. Wish those days would rebound!

C.V.Rajan profile image

C.V.Rajan  says:
4 weeks ago

Very neat presentation, useful for a budding author.

Duchess OBlunt profile image

Duchess OBlunt  says:
4 weeks ago

Great Hub Marisa. Thanks for writing it.....taking the time to bookmark it as I'm sure I will need to remind myself when editing.

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Katelyn Weel  says:
3 weeks ago

Very good advice...I'm working on my NanoWrimo novel now (well, procrastinating here) and it really is a big puzzle, trying to figure out who sees what and how to tell the reader. Thanks for the tips!

darkside profile image

darkside  says:
10 days ago

Fantastic piece of writing! A must-read for all fiction writers.

My second ever submitted short story to a magazine was rejected (my first ever was accepted, so I felt invincible) and it had been written in the first person. Which was very limiting. I let on a little too much of what was happening outside of what the character knew. When I got it back I rewrote it in the third person, sent it back in, and it was accepted.

A writer need to make sure that they're consistent all the way through, and not break any of the rules you've suggested. And also consider the impact and feel of a story if it were changed. Would it be of benefit to the readers experience to be told from a certain point of view.

There is also second-person point of view. But from memory I've only ever seen it used to any kind of effect in the pre-teen choose your own adventure style books. Though I guess DIY articles might use it a lot. So one should be aware of not continually jumping back and forth from first-person to second-person POV when writing such articles.

Marisa Wright profile image

Marisa Wright  says:
10 days ago

Thanks Darkside! I once read a novel in second person and it was the most annoying things I've ever read (or rather, tried to read - I didn't make it all the way through!).

I'm sometimes guilty of jumping from first-person to second-person when writing "how to" articles - I have to remind myself to go back and proof read.

Suki C profile image

Suki C  says:
9 days ago

This is excellent advice - I have just come across it and am book marking it to read it in more depth later

Thank you

Arthur Gulumian profile image

Arthur Gulumian  says:
6 days ago

Interesting article, but I can't agree that 1st person is limiting at all. Third person tells an overall story, but it is limited to portraying the character's emotions entirely. First person, however, can still give the same story as well as provide a first hand experience with what the narrator is going through. The purpose of first person narration is different from the third — they both share an equal goal (telling a story), but one tells a story in it's entire format, and the other is intended to make you see through the eyes of the author. Nothing in writing is limiting. Pleasure reading you.

Marisa Wright profile image

Marisa Wright  says:
6 days ago

Arthur, I can't agree with you. If you are writing in third person Omniscient, then I agree you get less of the character's emotions. But if you're writing in third person Subjective, you explore and convey your main character's emotions EXACTLY as you do in first person - but the bonus is, you can do the same for two or three other characters instead of being limited to just your main protagonist.

That's not to say that 1st person is a bad choice, it depends on what you're writing and how many viewpoints you need for a particular story.

Arthur Gulumian profile image

Arthur Gulumian  says:
5 days ago

Well if you were referring to writing from a subjective third person perspective, then I suppose you could explore the emotions of one or many of the characters. Usually third person is written in omniscient form; telling a story from a distant narrator. I also don't undervalue the importance of third person writing; I do often enjoy reading them more than first on a few occasions. However, I do believe the intended goal of a writer can be achieved through both means. The approach only differs as it should; which gives a variety in the books we love =]. I would have to say first person is a more effective way in entirely focusing on the protagonist's viewpoints; as we know, some books require the full integrity and attention of the protagonist only in order to better understand the story. Interesting argument you made =].

Marisa Wright profile image

Marisa Wright  says:
5 days ago

Arthur, third party omniscient may still be used in some literary forms, but virtually all "popular fiction" writers write in third party subjective these days. As I say in my opening paragraph, third party omniscient is too dispassionate to appeal to today's readers so it's gone out of vogue.

Elyse Eaton profile image

Elyse Eaton  says:
5 days ago

I have read many articles on this very subject. Yours, by far is the most well thought out and fully explained. Kudos.

Ben Zoltak profile image

Ben Zoltak  says:
11 hours ago

Thanks for the review and I like the inviting style/tone of your words. I've made more headway writing self help nonfiction lately, but I've been toying with First person POV in a fiction side project. I see all of your points as valid. Funny, for some reason I see Third Person Subjective sort of as my daughter's virtual world video games...

Thanks for the great article.

Ben

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